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Nutiper
10/19/20, 3:33 PM
I very much enjoyed the way this was set so firmly in 1919, right down to all the little details — using many standard tropes of hypnosis and MC (hypnotic videos, hypnotic audio tracks) but re-filtered through the lens of silent movies, Victrolas, and archaic tropes like The Sheik. Unusual, and refreshing! Part of me did want to see the story keep going, since the use of setting was so interesting and well-done, and I wouldn't have minded at all to see it explored further. Could have easily seen this develop into several chapters, I think! (Probably leading up to the point where the mind-addled narrator is gradually reunited with an equally-addled Adam.) But the story was very fun at its current length too.
Anonymous
10/19/20, 2:43 PM
great great great story! thank you very much!!
Martin
10/19/20, 2:31 PM
> If only a university existed where we would provide the reading material! Just wait a couple of hundred years ... :) People will analyze what this century has read and enjoyed. And I think the results might be pretty funny :)
10/19/20, 2:25 PM
If only a university existed where we would provide the reading material! Hot story,Derek, you outdid yourself on this one!
10/19/20, 1:31 PM
An extremely clever and sexy piece of metafiction! I wonder if the guys complaining about the genre on the "Dumbing Down" thread would appreciate it.
10/19/20, 1:04 PM
What a smart and sexy story! I appreciated all the references to classic stories. You are a gifted writer, Derek, and this story is on another level. Awesome work!
10/19/20, 12:55 PM
Of course, you knew I was gonna read and love this story just because of the author and subject matter. But I got a shout out, too!!!! Ah, MIMBO DROPS -- this is before I learned the preferred word was "Himbo" -- I used "Mimbo" because that term had been used on SEINFELD. Thank you so much! What a great fun story. I'm sure I'll cum back to this many times.
ParadoxBear
10/19/20, 12:51 PM
> ** Still, there is a critical difference between Old Man Bowden’s transformation into the Great One and the Deputy’s and that may have an effect on the rest of the supporting characters** Off the top of my head, it's probably the fact that Bowden technically died while bonding with the Great One, and thus the Great One is 100% symbiont without Bowden's former humanity tempering the symbiont's drive to repopulate, whereas the Deputy is (presumably) health enough to survive the bonding, and thus this second Great One will have more personality- it still has a drive to repopulate, but is more willing to seek a symbiotic relationship between humans and the symbionts, rather than the original Great One, who seems to be willing to basically cordyceps humanity for the sake of the symbionts. So Lane, Snake, and Rugby Boy may yet retain their personality, while still winding up utterly devoted to the Deputy. Alternatively, the Deputy's time as a familiar will create a more equal relationship between himself and Lane, thus setting up the chance for some juicy conflict if Lane attempts to basically make himself king of the bonded- which, let's face it, he probably will try to do. All in all, the stage is set for an epic confrontation between Bowden and his army of symbiont drones, and the Deputy and his ragtag band of rebels. Whatever the outcome, I'm sure we will all be able to shoot loads to the resolution for years to come!
Martin
10/19/20, 12:28 PM
Marvelous! I've read this story because of the comments, and I have to say, I'm honored and a bit proud that you chose GSS as a meta-base for your story. But you should have linked to those stories you mention! I had to search them, and some of them were hard to find (as you switched Sinners and Saints for example). Others might have similar problems. And it's certainly an honor for those stories' authors to be mentioned here!
10/19/20, 12:23 PM
I Love this Man, thank you