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10/14/20, 6:48 PM
Great job 👍 continue .
10/14/20, 6:42 PM
I would love to read more of this :)
10/14/20, 6:13 PM
I enjoyed this story. I loved the medley of mind controlling sandwiched in the main story. Would be nice to see more of this kind of writing :)
Nutiper
10/14/20, 5:47 PM
Not my kink but this was *very* well-written and I absolutely enjoyed the thoroughness and the density of the world-building. Fantastic, immersive stuff. Even in rare moments when it got a little info-dump-y, the way it sank me into the world really kept my attention just from sheer interest. Oh, and I wanted to give kudos for how the worldbuilding aspects did *lots* of great work with set-up and foreshadowing of events to come. (For example, the way that the virus jumps from being a literal virus to a "computer" virus is fantastically foreshadowed with how damn thoroughly the technology has been embedded into their brains. Pretty much, the moment that Jacob mentioned sharing a "program", I had an instinct that things were about to go south for Robin, entirely because of how well you'd foreshadowed it.)
10/14/20, 4:05 PM
interesting. the more physical aspect of the abduction wasn't a turn off for me, but i'm usually more interested in the induction process and how a will slowly folds. can't wait to see how Henry is converted if we are going to be using various methods. thank you for the fun read.
Moby
10/14/20, 3:17 PM
@Transformheave Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! And thank you for the critique~ I'm always happy to receive criticism of my stories
caca509a
10/14/20, 3:00 PM
oh yeeeeeees !!! awesome sequel... cant wait for more
10/14/20, 1:39 PM
love this!
10/14/20, 12:17 PM
Since I'm neither British nor American I can't really say anything about how the characters sound, it felt a little bit forced sometimes though. However, that might just be a personal thing ;) . I loved the crazy week stories and this one is a nice addition! It's nice to see some background to the changes. To me the introduction of people calling themselves "boi" seemed a bit abrupt though and startled me a little bit. And on a more personal note, it would've been nice to dive into Matt's transformation, that part felt a little short for some reason. However, hot story, definitely saving it for a few extra reads!
10/14/20, 11:35 AM
cool story. strong and meaningful plot that keeps your interest.