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10/14/20, 8:07 PM
Honestly, I read stories on this site who are a lot more gruesome, like a vampire one with explicit deaths and a conversion therapy for straight peoples in a dystopia. I like this story, kind of hot, creative, but the chapters are so short, it feels like every scene is it's own chapter, and that the story goes very slowly. My slave twins felt a bit rushed, here it feel stretched.
10/14/20, 7:37 PM
Extremely hot and well written! A true classic already!
10/14/20, 6:53 PM
Sexy. Very very sexy. So, im gonna volunteer myself to assist in helping those poor unfortunate jocks who get JPS.
10/14/20, 6:48 PM
Great job 👍 continue .
10/14/20, 6:42 PM
I would love to read more of this :)
10/14/20, 6:13 PM
I enjoyed this story. I loved the medley of mind controlling sandwiched in the main story. Would be nice to see more of this kind of writing :)
Nutiper
10/14/20, 5:47 PM
Not my kink but this was *very* well-written and I absolutely enjoyed the thoroughness and the density of the world-building. Fantastic, immersive stuff. Even in rare moments when it got a little info-dump-y, the way it sank me into the world really kept my attention just from sheer interest. Oh, and I wanted to give kudos for how the worldbuilding aspects did *lots* of great work with set-up and foreshadowing of events to come. (For example, the way that the virus jumps from being a literal virus to a "computer" virus is fantastically foreshadowed with how damn thoroughly the technology has been embedded into their brains. Pretty much, the moment that Jacob mentioned sharing a "program", I had an instinct that things were about to go south for Robin, entirely because of how well you'd foreshadowed it.)
10/14/20, 4:05 PM
interesting. the more physical aspect of the abduction wasn't a turn off for me, but i'm usually more interested in the induction process and how a will slowly folds. can't wait to see how Henry is converted if we are going to be using various methods. thank you for the fun read.
Moby
10/14/20, 3:17 PM
@Transformheave Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! And thank you for the critique~ I'm always happy to receive criticism of my stories
caca509a
10/14/20, 3:00 PM
oh yeeeeeees !!! awesome sequel... cant wait for more