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Maxigay
11/12/20, 1:38 PM
Very good story, all reference to uniforms and rubber makes it very morbid, perhaps Ng5hvlo4's comment about the hasty in the conversion of a leader is very fast, the same in the capture of his children, perhaps if the idea was to be a continuous series She would have faced more calmly, it all depends now if you follow her which would be fantastic.
Anonymous
11/12/20, 1:20 PM
Tyler reminds me of German Shepherd ,which means that he needs to be trained well ; )
11/12/20, 12:57 PM
Fuckin amazing Boss,
Luke
11/12/20, 12:53 PM
The description of the dramatic tension between Tyler and Robin is terrific, never have I ever shipped a couple like this pair before. Cannot wait to see how Tyler work hard, hoping to impress the professor.
11/12/20, 12:12 PM
This. Is. GREAT!!!
Ng5hvlo4
11/12/20, 12:11 PM
it is a good start, but it was difficult to follow the dialogue (using " " and new paragraphs for that would help), and while the introduction and MC scenes were well thought out, it felt rushed to get to the point where the recruit became a Squad Leader and went out to the streets with the others (who were not mentioned at all before then, making it feel out of place). The rubber aspect was a nice touch, but (at least for me) the smoking aspect took away from the hot factor; I'm sure others will disagree with me on that point.
Anonymous
11/12/20, 9:24 AM
It's a good start. Looking forward to what comes next.
11/12/20, 8:22 AM
Always good to have MAL back.
11/12/20, 8:18 AM
Please continue this!
Martin
11/12/20, 7:29 AM
> Maybe you could check with Martin if he can transfer the chapters in the old series to this one… The "owner" of the old series is still HypnoFanatic and I just don't want to take their ownership away. I'm fine with creating a new series as a continuation, and I agree, it would be perfect to add a link to the original series. I took the liberty of adding that link to your story.