This is an INCREDIBLE story! I'm an ass man myself (that and pecs), so this is right up my alley. Amazing stuff and amazing descriptions! :)

I feel the same as the other commenter, fun concept done pretty well just needs to be paced out a little more. and yeah better elaborate on stuff like the transfer brain ball smarts I was also confused what was going on haha, like it dropping as his primitive urges continue? this concept reminds me of one of my favorite tg stories where guys get tf'd by cum, really goes heavy into the steamy tf descriptions and is a lot of messy fun(: might give you some inspiration if you decide to continue, had fun with it! http://www.fictionmania.tv/stories/readtextstory.html?storyID=342412333894896261 I know this place is guy centric but I'd LOVE too see what happens if a female friend gets cum drenched, fellow tf into a guy or lesbian butch gooey tf, lots of fun options!!

@Udems. Same, DILFS are my thing, what can I do? I love to read everyone's personal opinions about what they want with the story because sometimes are great ideas that I could adapt. I don’t like to say on here what I would or wouldn’t add to the story because even some of the original ideas that I had weren’t used. So about feet, I can't say that it's 100% sure that it would be used on the story, but I can try ;) @Heru Kane. There's much I can do with Dell, but I think first I have to explore Michael. Let's be patient :) I avoid to be direct with future plots because I don't want to force myself to keep a path only because I said before that I would. But with the incest, I'm sure that the story will go there. And the last thing I can say it's that there is a reason for Michael to be the typical gym bro and Dell the classic football jock. It let me explore some fun situations.

I'm a DC resident, too. Send your reality-warper to Adams Morgan, because I'd love to see what he could do at Pitcher's and Duplex. Although I think it's already happened at the latter... :)

i love stories like these, when they are trapped in their own mind. great revenge story!

Well, to each their own, the feet its just an option lol But I do hope Dan gets Bob as the boyfriend, I also love dilfs over boys as victims :P If you want to keep it to the family, definitely an uncle or a grampa can be added <3

Very creative and clever! I especially enjoyed the third chapter when Julien and Gil were subliminally programming each other. Awesome work!

I think part of it is the hope that the second son, Dell right, yeah Dell, is either straight but with a love of submission and so enjoys the idea of being a good boy or he is bisexual and so easily falls under the sway of Dan, and so he becomes a quite willing boyfriend sort of guy for him. I just like the amusing turn around that one of the three actually naturally like what is going on. So yeah, I think Dan dating the youngest of the three family members (and probably around his own age) would be more fun. Oooh yeah, so cool to hear the direct 'there will be incest' answer. Its kind of hot to think how far the three will have fallen when they don't think anything of sucking each other's cocks or rimming each other's asses or getting fucked together by the same guy. Maybe if Dell is treated poorly but his father and older brother then he can be allowed to top them, as a sign from Dan saying how good Dell is as a boy. Ooh. Dell is on the team. Awesome. Soooo maybe he can do something like get the coach of his team to see some videos and maybe said coach can come over and be a good bro as well. Hell, since you didn't design who said coach is, if you want to keep it in the family (lol) then it can be Dell's uncle, Bob's brother, and the two could have fun times under Dan's control. While I am not so much into feet I do agree that having Michael be into a differnet body part would be fun. I think muscles. I can see him wanting to worship them or have his own be played with. I also see him as a moaning needy slut when it comes to being fucked. Now, this is my opinion, but I like the idea of Bob being allowed to keep respectability outside of the home. He has a good business and so I think Dan wouldn't want to ruin that. Michael though, as he has dropped out of college, doesn't have a job, and is basically living at the gym, can be turned to less respectable activities. Oooh maybe besides his special work at the shop and his online shows he can become a 'trainer' of say some gay guys from the gym - he gets paid officially to train but really its all about sex. Just an idea. In this by the way I really think it would be cool, like I said, for Dell to actually realize what is going on, like it, and want more of it. I think that might be a fun dynamic. Obviously I am just reader, you are the writer, so do what works for you. :)

Yes, I made this one shorter because it's actually half of a chapter that was getting too long.

okay. comments ahem. to be fair continuity is what you make of it but we don't know what happened to the initial wave of men Smitty and Mike and I think well it's the comic that has submitting deciding to leave the town not necessarily the original story so so it's entirely possible in addition to other meteors that there are rogue assets going around doing as they will. or not all pollination needs to be direct from host still still give something for our Scully to do somehow missing a ridiculously odd migration pattern all to one defunct farm overall overall this has been a solid experience