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10/3/20, 9:51 PM
is this story done or is there another part?
10/3/20, 9:50 PM
I do want Bob as the boyfriend but dont forget his bitching and house duties! About the Michael, make him open that site to earn money for Dan. Its sad that he quited the sport club, I would have loved for you to control his coach on the future :P Btw. Whats the name of that story you mentioned? The one that's about a twink implanting memories to a man to create his perfect dilf?
Lusty Stallion
10/3/20, 9:45 PM
What a atory man! So much to love about it.
Lusty Stallion
10/3/20, 9:19 PM
Thanks anon. That's a really helpful critique. I guess theres some unexplored areas here & I'm gonna write your suggestion into the next one man. Nothing wrong wuth being fat or single and my apologies to any reader who was offended by my unitentional portrayal there. It's always handy to have an outside view. A fate for Workee perhaps?
10/3/20, 9:14 PM
Didn't know we had so many avid authors and readers in DC! Great work!
10/3/20, 7:57 PM
Really nice scene! Jason's and the Caesar's (I forgot his name, paradoxaly) stories captivate me as much as the prince's or the ongoing power changes. But it's really short... I hope it means a lot happens next chapters, at least in status quo, even if they are indeed massive changes in this one too.
NZDom
10/3/20, 7:47 PM
I like the idea of making Bob the house wife and Dan the man of the house with the boys following his every order and looking up to him. love reading your stories! thanks for writing :D
Oct 2, 2020
Anonymous
10/3/20, 5:55 PM
There are writers on this blog who are English-speaking who cannot write as well as you. You did a good job. The two or three boo-boos were more syntax and conversational than hard-core grammar. Loved it!!
Anonymous
10/3/20, 5:36 PM
Is there any fat character in this story that wasn't presented as ugly and/or less desirable for being fat? Like, weight loss and fat to fit can be your kinks, and that is fine, but having your main character berating or feeling sorry for every single fat character and the characters themselves believing that being fat is inherently bad/unseemly like it is the most natural thing in the world and never reflecting upon it or being called out is just fatphobic writing imho. Which is a shame because I otherwise like this story and your writing. I would like to see you address that next. Maybe make a fat character that doesn't feel bad about being fat, and that being OK? And if you really don't want to make a character like this, maybe just ease up on the insults/condescention. I hate criticizing stuff like this, but in every single chapter this has been a very consistent and relevant plot point...
10/3/20, 5:20 PM
For Bob, I'm very interested in a romance angle, and I would prefer him to be more respected that Michael. The new suggestions are very nice! Make a lot of sense for Bob and even with only three it feels like things will be different for Michael. For the future, yeah, perhaps makes Michael a slave who loves to do anything the other men tell him to. Making him more passive would be great. Truly feels like he needs that anger management.