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10/3/20, 7:57 PM
Really nice scene! Jason's and the Caesar's (I forgot his name, paradoxaly) stories captivate me as much as the prince's or the ongoing power changes. But it's really short... I hope it means a lot happens next chapters, at least in status quo, even if they are indeed massive changes in this one too.
NZDom
10/3/20, 7:47 PM
I like the idea of making Bob the house wife and Dan the man of the house with the boys following his every order and looking up to him. love reading your stories! thanks for writing :D
Oct 2, 2020
Anonymous
10/3/20, 5:55 PM
There are writers on this blog who are English-speaking who cannot write as well as you. You did a good job. The two or three boo-boos were more syntax and conversational than hard-core grammar. Loved it!!
Anonymous
10/3/20, 5:36 PM
Is there any fat character in this story that wasn't presented as ugly and/or less desirable for being fat? Like, weight loss and fat to fit can be your kinks, and that is fine, but having your main character berating or feeling sorry for every single fat character and the characters themselves believing that being fat is inherently bad/unseemly like it is the most natural thing in the world and never reflecting upon it or being called out is just fatphobic writing imho. Which is a shame because I otherwise like this story and your writing. I would like to see you address that next. Maybe make a fat character that doesn't feel bad about being fat, and that being OK? And if you really don't want to make a character like this, maybe just ease up on the insults/condescention. I hate criticizing stuff like this, but in every single chapter this has been a very consistent and relevant plot point...
10/3/20, 5:20 PM
For Bob, I'm very interested in a romance angle, and I would prefer him to be more respected that Michael. The new suggestions are very nice! Make a lot of sense for Bob and even with only three it feels like things will be different for Michael. For the future, yeah, perhaps makes Michael a slave who loves to do anything the other men tell him to. Making him more passive would be great. Truly feels like he needs that anger management.
Oct 3, 2020
10/3/20, 5:01 PM
It was a good story. I would've loved to see more changes, or maybe more consistent changes between all 3 men, but it was fun to read through. One nitpick is that there didn't seem to be any amount of mind control at all.
10/3/20, 4:51 PM
I personaly think that Dan should have Bob as a sex slave/pet but not just him you should also make Bob's kids sex slaves/pets as well and all of them willing to have sex with each other if Dan wants it.
Anonymous
10/3/20, 4:30 PM
this is incredible would be a shame for some stuffy closted congressmen to get amazing asses at the hands of wes smith
10/3/20, 4:25 PM
This is one of the hottest stories I've read on the site. I hope Part 2 comes soon! Also, DC person here. Loved the real place names.
10/3/20, 4:02 PM
Hmm, interesting. Okay, so I am not exactly a fan of the boyfriend thing when it comes to Bob. I am also not as much a fan of making Bob the lowest in the family, why should Michael be superior to him. That said I do like him keeping the house clean and stuff, so that was fun. The thing I found interesting here is the Michael nuances. He was planning on making online videos but was worried about men looking at him. Well, I think Dan should have him do that, but focus only on gay sites. I think Dan should have Michael focus his attention on his jock body, his gym work, and his need to show off his body. He wants to show his body, and he will want to show it off to men - as obviously only men can truly understand how great his body is. He will be thankful to Dan for being shown his true nature as a muscle boy for men. (I hope the online porn stuff stays online, don't make him a whore in the physical. Though maybe a code can be given to some local gay men so that they can get a blowjob from Michael when they take their car to be serviced at Bob's shop.) On the commands. I like the ones given to Michael. I hope his love of muscles and bodies can be enhanced. His submission when he is touched and stuff by men. Maybe an implanted desire for cum in his ass or mouth because cum is a protein and will help him be a better jock boy. On the Bob one's well, I like the role model one but the other two just have me shrug. I think Bob already thinks Dan is super sexy and such and I don't know if that is necessary. But I do think Bob thinking that everything Dan does is good, right, natural would be great. Good, development chapter. Looking forward to seeing Michael go all muscle slut. hehe PS. Loved the rimming hint at the end, would love to rim a dude who is all out of it in trance. hehe