Recent Comments

9/29/20, 12:24 PM
\*shrug* To each their own. The point of the story/kink is that the idiots *don't* get their comeuppance.
James
9/29/20, 12:21 PM
This was so so good. Solid simple premise about betraying trust. Hot descriptions that aren't overdetailed, drowning out the pacing. And the odd juxtaposition between Jesse thinking he's in control, and his absolute oblivious reprogramming was a nice twist on the genre. Made me click the author to see your other stories, but sadly, Author Hidden
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
9/29/20, 12:09 PM
Having cancer, smoking is one area I avoid. Everything else about being controlled & changing sounds hot. I would readily put on this mask if it was sent to me: Hunter Wolfe 1779 Kirby Parkway Unit 1-118 Memphis, TN 38138 No harm in trying, right?
Anonymous
9/29/20, 12:04 PM
I live to serve the Virus
9/29/20, 11:29 AM
Rubber and cigars normally don't excite me, but this story is very sexy and well written.
Anonymous
9/29/20, 11:17 AM
this story seems backwards. there's a difference when it comes to dominant and just wannabe idiots with magic powers. this is the latter. the story remains unsatisfying as the idiot never gets his comeuppance.
The author
9/29/20, 10:40 AM
Jeez not replying to your comments is hard :') So I logged out to do so without ruining the surprise. Thanks for your feedback, originally I planned on shifting focus between the two, but having two pov's is something I was having my doubts about and being able to be anonymous made my try something new, best not repeat it ;) Thanks again!
9/29/20, 9:04 AM
I wish this hadn't been entered into the contest, because it's a good story, but it's only tangentially related to the pandemic theme. I'd really like to see a sequel with Smokepig corrupting other men; it feels like we're reading an origin story, and the really exciting bits are being saved for the next installments.
Evan
9/29/20, 9:03 AM
I agree with Hypnothrill, it's a great concept with some sexy scenes and I'd encourage taking his feedback to tighten it up for even more enjoyment and grow as an author. There seemed a lot of political messaging at the start that, frankly, adds nothing to the story and seems a bit forced. It's your story and write how you want but you could easily skip all of it and have the story still make perfect sense. Especially if you focus on having us see through the characters experiencing events so we learn the world that way, rather than just told the info up front. Thanks for sharing your story! Who doesn't love monster dicks and floods of cum!
9/29/20, 8:42 AM
Oh, like the idea of omegas from the last comment, Micheal definitely deserves to be lower than beta