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Rio
9/25/20, 3:27 PM
Спасибо вам за этот красный рассказ!
9/25/20, 2:56 PM
> I think Part 49 would have been hotter if it was told from the perspective of the waiter, and we only got overheard snippets of the Lenoldis’ conversation. > Valid point-- and I agree. I have discovered that POLLINATION works best when told from the victim's POV. At the time I initially plotted this scene, my intent was that it be from the waiter's perspective. But to be honest, I've been enjoying the Lenoldi's relationship and I thought the insight into the Father's motivation/ philosophy was important for plot developments later. It was all too subtle to be captured by the waiter overhearing stuff. Next chapter, you'll meet the hapless Willis, and I think that will get us all back on track with the way this narrative works most successfully. > The part with Devin especially. > There are certain new characters that I'm really enjoying: Rugby Boy, Vance, Willis (for comedy relief), and poor Devin. The fact is I haven't figured out the end of Devin's story -- I have two options for him, one good and one expected. The "good" ending will inconvenience the plot -- the "expected" ending (the ending I initially plotted) will disappoint Devin fans. (And I admit, I'm a Devin fan. I've really come to enjoy working with the character, so I'd like to keep him around. You know, expand the cast a little further.)
9/25/20, 2:32 PM
Loving this! The part with Devin especially. I'd love to get more parts from the perspective of the still-transforming men; for instance, I think Part 49 would have been hotter if it was told from the perspective of the waiter, and we only got overheard snippets of the Lenoldis' conversation.
Zac
9/25/20, 2:24 PM
Damn, that ending was *hot!*
9/25/20, 2:21 PM
oof,the working out in his suit part got me more than I thought it would. A story perfect for my taste
9/25/20, 2:08 PM
I'm so glad you've started a sequel :-)
9/25/20, 2:00 PM
loved this!
9/25/20, 1:52 PM
Oh. MYGOD! I just love clothed erotica and men in suits especially. Combo that with the hypnosis and humiliation and it's a perfect story for me. I hope you'll get the next chapter out soon
Anonymous
9/25/20, 1:25 PM
Very great writing. The bedroom blowjob scene, aside from being very hot (thank you!), made me realize Bob truly has taken on the bitch role with pleasure. He mimics and acts for Dan the same way he would expect the women he has been with (his 'bitches'). It's very hot. The devotion is cute (and hot), without being excessive, and the switch to gruff alpha when discussing Michael was interesting. Looking forward to see how Michael's arrival is weaved into the story.
9/25/20, 1:16 PM
please do part 2 or a second encounter