Recent Comments

Mitch_CoRob
9/12/20, 3:08 PM
This was such a hot story, I hope it continues.
9/12/20, 2:17 PM
> Tully’d better be careful! > Now, THAT I agree with.
Anonymous
9/12/20, 12:56 PM
well done ! can't wait for more !!
Nov 13, 2008
9/12/20, 12:29 PM
I love absolutely everything about this story. Granted, it starts on a dubious non-consent, but the whole dynamic behind the process, the inherent balance and equality of it, this will become my favourite story. It shows it is possible to write a story that doesn't have one side of the equation debased to a pulp. Even the symmetry of the two guys (blond and black, white and tanned,...) all of it is perfect. It's questionable to what extent I can say the two have >genuine< feelings for each other, with Andy's situation at the beginning and all but given the website we are on, it's splitting hairs really. BTW, this is one of only 3 stories in the WHOLE of GSS that are tagged with "happy ending" - one of the other two is Linden's throne...
9/12/20, 12:15 PM
Not so much.
9/12/20, 11:54 AM
@Hypnothrill I choose to believe that your second suggestion of what's happening IS what's happening, whether it's explained or not. The plants seemingly have one goal and they can pacify any man that seems to stand in their way. I assume that there must be a way to pacify the women too. Tully'd better be careful!
Tommi95
9/12/20, 10:52 AM
Good story, but bad ending. Ryan is meant to be Rob's slave, not Brute's slave. If I understood well, Ryan will spend his life serving Brute, not Rob. Rob tricked him. Ryan is obviously not happy, he finds Brute disgusting and repulsive. He deserved happiness. I too want justice. I want Rob's plane to crush, the collar to be accidentally broken so that Ryan can escape during a delivery, report everything to the police, and get in possession of his money.
9/12/20, 8:52 AM
Love this story. Keep it up.
Lusty Stallion
9/12/20, 5:55 AM
Guys, thanks for your comments. These keep me writing and spur on ideas. I'm really enjoying writing these stories. I know some guys would love the photos, they just take so much time, and I think some of my previous stories have suffered in plot and description through creating them. Doesn't mean I won't do that again, but I wanted to develop my style a bit more. So thanks for coming on the ride, and keep telling me what you'd like to see
Sexcrab
9/12/20, 5:17 AM
Great story, it fits my tastes: daddies and/or muscle alpha/top guys being submissive. Your narrative and writing are simple but well-paced and I must say: I cum twice. It doesn't usually happen in such a short story part. Now, as for your decisions, I would say that so far you are doing well, although, in my view, the protagonist is not being so smart, which in itself is not a problem since Dan does not have to be infallible. The problem is that this path you are taking is that, in my view, it comes to a halt and you have no idea what to make your story go on or at least, how to do it. I mean, the protagonist has an entire weekend to make alpha daddy stud Bob Summers submissive to him but he has already lost almost the entire first day because he was clumsy, right?I think the perfect opportunity for Dan to reflect on this vacillation and think of a solution that allows Dan to access Bob Summers’s mind much more quickly. So Dan can make Bob watch a new video containing the commands: - I'm going to let Dan hypnotize me; - I will be easily hypnotized by Dan every time he tries and; - I won't worry about the idea of being hypnotized by Dan. That way, Dan will have the doors open to stir Bob Summers' mind whenever he wants. My punishment suggestion: Since Dan spoke of "poetic justice" (I like it), make sure Bob not only doesn't realize that he's being controlled but ends up believing that he deserves to be used by Dan for believing that Dan is his alpha. At least for a while. It would be hot to see a homophobic, misogynistic bastard son of a bitch as he punished for his own codes of conduct. And the commands already imposed on Bob's mind will not lose their usefulness, since the commands above would only work fully on someone who already believes that Dan is superior to him.