Recent Comments

9/11/20, 3:01 PM
> Mr Mac’s three boys are a particularly hot touch. > The Variants are proving to be great fun to work with, too! They're easy to write.
9/11/20, 2:58 PM
> I was honestly a little worried when I read the first two sections, because it seemed to be starting off very slow. > Well, slow-er to be sure. If I'd started off at the breakneck pace that Book One ended on, I'd have no place to ramp up to -- we'd end up with single-sentence sections! I think the "establishing shots" of our cast after such a long break is forgivable. As you note, I pick it up by the end. > And I think I would have been happier if Mrs. Lenoldi had stayed off the canvas entirely; her presence in the household only messed with my suspension of disbelief > I'm legit sorry about that -- GOOD NEWS! We'll never see her again! > Maybe I’ll have to write that story someday :-) > ME: Fanboy drooling...
9/11/20, 2:47 PM
I'm so excited with this story 15 years in the making. Love some family fun time and I can't wait for the next chapter. Well, I guess we've waited years, so I can wait a bit longer. Thanks again for the brilliant chapter!
9/11/20, 2:43 PM
I was honestly a little worried when I read the first two sections, because it seemed to be starting off very slow. (And I think I would have been happier if Mrs. Lenoldi had stayed off the canvas entirely; her presence in the household only messed with my suspension of disbelief). But the pace started to pick up by the end of this installment, and some of the new developments, like the Variants, got me really excited to see what comes next. I'm just a little sad that the action is now shifting from the largely-transformed Indiana town where the Lenoldis and Mr. Mac live. I would have liked to have seen more vivid descriptions of what a community is like when nearly all the men have been transformed by Symbionts and they no longer need to hide their urge to fuck and repopulate. Maybe I'll have to write that story someday :-)
9/11/20, 2:43 PM
Great start to a new season! Mr Mac's three boys are a particularly hot touch. So glad to see this continue.
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9/11/20, 2:17 PM
Keep Bob oblivious and think his changing mental gymnastics about sucking cock is completely rational given Dan as *the* Alpha.
Anonymous
9/11/20, 2:16 PM
yo imagine if it was just a rick roll
9/11/20, 1:46 PM
I'm really liking the story so far. I love how the more he uses the ring the more depraved he is getting.
9/11/20, 1:29 PM
Nice, clear, direct writing. Definitely interested to see what comes next.
9/11/20, 1:10 PM
more of Bob!!!!! make him as the slave of the family!