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Sexcrab
9/12/20, 5:17 AM
Great story, it fits my tastes: daddies and/or muscle alpha/top guys being submissive. Your narrative and writing are simple but well-paced and I must say: I cum twice. It doesn't usually happen in such a short story part. Now, as for your decisions, I would say that so far you are doing well, although, in my view, the protagonist is not being so smart, which in itself is not a problem since Dan does not have to be infallible. The problem is that this path you are taking is that, in my view, it comes to a halt and you have no idea what to make your story go on or at least, how to do it. I mean, the protagonist has an entire weekend to make alpha daddy stud Bob Summers submissive to him but he has already lost almost the entire first day because he was clumsy, right?I think the perfect opportunity for Dan to reflect on this vacillation and think of a solution that allows Dan to access Bob Summers’s mind much more quickly. So Dan can make Bob watch a new video containing the commands: - I'm going to let Dan hypnotize me; - I will be easily hypnotized by Dan every time he tries and; - I won't worry about the idea of being hypnotized by Dan. That way, Dan will have the doors open to stir Bob Summers' mind whenever he wants. My punishment suggestion: Since Dan spoke of "poetic justice" (I like it), make sure Bob not only doesn't realize that he's being controlled but ends up believing that he deserves to be used by Dan for believing that Dan is his alpha. At least for a while. It would be hot to see a homophobic, misogynistic bastard son of a bitch as he punished for his own codes of conduct. And the commands already imposed on Bob's mind will not lose their usefulness, since the commands above would only work fully on someone who already believes that Dan is superior to him.
Anonymous
9/12/20, 3:35 AM
I haver to admit that I like a story of Karmic equality and justice. Rob fucks this guy over and end of story. No sense that Slave is happy or content or satisfied; just another shmuck who never realised his potential; lived in denial and will die a miserable slave to some opportunist. It offends my sense of justice and balance. I would love to see you come up with an alternative ending
Anonymous
9/12/20, 1:09 AM
so f hot!
Dudesoos
9/12/20, 12:13 AM
I wanna see Bob made to think everything he is, is betta. The muscles, the beard, body hair, height, cocks size. I want him to think he's a loser for being who he is. and that Dan is everything an Alpha should be. Because of this, he naturally think he should suck up to him like a nerd sucking up to the most popular guy at school. That would be so hot ! looking forward to the next chapter :D
CockThief
9/11/20, 11:26 PM
Now this was an amazing story! I read it two nights ago and haven't stopped thinking about it since
9/11/20, 10:14 PM
Hello there First, excellent work! Small nerd controlling big daddy brute is a fantastic theme! I would love to see Bob struggles through while Dan builds his confidence overtime. I think its more natural and fits the background of the characters. Personally, I hope to see trance-like hypnosis. Maybe a safe trigger word to gain completely control over Bob when its necessary? Regarding the length and frequency, I think short but more frequent update is better. You know, it keeps reader expecting more. Well, at least it is the case for me~
9/11/20, 9:08 PM
Makes me want to be next. Like how nearly instantaneously the mindset converts the moment the mask is placed on them, and how accepting and normal the changes become in spite of the initial confusion. I like the pace and the descriptions of what is going on allows some freedom to fill in the blanks. Hit plenty of my buttons!
9/11/20, 8:15 PM
This came out a while ago on the Patreon. If you like screamingmoist’s style and you’ve got a few bucks to spare, I recommend it. He delivers high quality content regularly.
Anonymous
9/11/20, 7:28 PM
This is a really good sampler, for once the sponsered content is worth a read
9/11/20, 7:14 PM
@Gay_Genes Thanks man!