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9/11/20, 6:32 AM
@gaybird No please! GET SPECIFIC. School's Out used to be a one shot, then the comments section showed so much love and interest and I was inspired enough to bang out a whole other chapter! It was amazing, but no one really gave me a direction and because of that I wrote what I wondered about, and it didn't recieve nearly as well. If another chapter is to be written, I need directions that people want to explore with me. So far everyone wants to see Benji's storyline close out, as well as more aspects of student life in the school. BlondieBoy mentioned liking the first half with Cody, and not much other specifics have been given thus far, so guess what the in prog of School's Out 3 looks like? How did Cody get that number and password? I'm a feedback junkie. Feed me. I give stories in return.
ThatOneGayFur
9/11/20, 6:26 AM
I love this! Make me a pup too!!!!
9/11/20, 6:15 AM
@gaybird Please don't ever feel odd commenting, I love each one. I enjoy being able to write with the mental voice from a character. Little details like how a character mentally starts capitalizing and lowercasing words to denote power shifts always did it for me as a reader, so I attempted to emulate that as a writer. I had to go back and re-read several times to make sure after a certain point that I didn't use hard numerical terms because the limited 3rd person POV no longer knew what those were. I REALLY wanted to use the word penetrated in the sex scene but realized immediately that Slaveboy would NEVER be able to remember that word, so I got to play with language a bit. It made it fun and I ended up taking the whole project a bit more seriously than maybe I should have since I was so completely dedicated to properly conveying the new mental state that Master had made. In the next chapter, Master's narrative voice is so different that it practically reads like a totally separate story, and he has a horrid tendency to jump around from subject to subject without properly explaining the whole context and being generally confusing, but I'm working on that. I ALMOST want to leave it so haphazard, because it actually is his mental voice, but I can't stand it also. I want the story to read well. The relationship between 'Zane and Master' and 'Slaveboy and Master' are two entirely different things and it's really interesting to find how one man refers to another in two distinct ways. Master's relationship with Slaveboy is affectionate and sweet, if rooted in something unhealthy. Master's opinion of Zane is damn distasteful. I hope as I give more of this story, you will continue to enjoy it.
9/11/20, 6:10 AM
Adding to my favourites. I loved the premise and the ripple effects.
9/11/20, 5:57 AM
it is indeed great to have you back.....great story idea as always sir.
9/11/20, 5:18 AM
I live to serve the virus
9/11/20, 5:10 AM
you asked what content we'd want to see more of. my answer is all. all of it. i have specific things that compel me that i really wanna know more about, but i know coming into someones comments with unsolicited suggestions is kind of a dick move so unless im prompted im just going to say that i would like As Much More As You Have In You
9/11/20, 5:00 AM
I can’t believe I’ven’t commented on this story yet. I really love it keep coming back to it again and again. It’s a really wonderful amazing ride.
9/11/20, 4:39 AM
oh. oh i really really like this. i feel odd leaving a comment because i feel like everything i want to say has already been said? but its such a clever idea, and the changing in voice as the protagonist gets dumbed down is done so smoothly! i also love how the stranger is written and his odd little cheerful salesman-like qualities. AND i love stories where the protagonist is made dumber in some aspects but not others. like, they're a bit slow and can't really read or count but they're not far enough gone that they feel like an infant. and this really hits that nail on the head in that respect. also i know stories like this aren't meant to be That Deep and they're mostly just supposed to be sexy but i can't help feeling like i kind of want to know everything about these characters. partially because i'm a sap and i love romance, even though a romance like this wouldn't be exactly realistic healthy or sustainable, but also partially because, again, the voices are so fresh and fun that i want to spend a lot of time with them. anyways, i'm rambling, but suffice it to say if you ever write more of this i'll be there in a heartbeat