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9/11/20, 3:05 AM
You might have been making it up, but it became a cohesive story and one that many of us enjoyed reading. I always hoped there'd be a sequel, so many possibilities. I've gotta say, the fellow who borrowed the idea, the one where the gov stepped in and made the symbiots into rubber drones and killed off the great one with round up... he had a good story too. Kinda hoped he'd continue his version too. Like alternate universes...
9/11/20, 2:51 AM
what wouldve happened if Aiden put the collar back on- Does that erase Codys influence over Alex and now Aiden has control? The dynamics between Aiden and Alex wouldve been amazing. Alex I believe wouldve accepted Aidens control over him in more of a Boytfriend aspect rather than a Slave-Master relationship.
9/11/20, 2:25 AM
Hot! Loved the time jump in the end and the butt plug ultimatum.
Anonymous
9/11/20, 2:06 AM
Great story, and great finale!
9/11/20, 2:00 AM
A very hot start, keep it up. The writing was good, I'd say your opening disclaimer is the weaker part, but doesn't detract from the story. Just add some sort of separator between that and the story proper.
9/11/20, 1:54 AM
That's a sweet, warm happy ending. Good work on your first story on this site, Pawn! I'd have to say that although there were some parts in between that were not particular of my tastes, all in all it was a series that was well written, and the plots flowed relatively smoothly along the way. Keep up the good work and hope to read more of your work on here in the future!
9/11/20, 1:45 AM
Absaman, 15 years later, this story still blows my mind and remains one of my greatest fantasies. So glad to see you coming back to it and giving us more still. It may have gone out of control, as you say, but in a way, that made it so much hotter. Thank you for sharing your stories, and trust that we're still here desiring more.
9/11/20, 1:24 AM
I'd really enjoy seeing the differences between the two brother's isolation periods. So far I'm excited for where this story can grow into. Your grasp of english is actually pretty decent. Keep up the good work!
nycboot
9/11/20, 1:10 AM
I know people in the forum have spoken about how artificial intelligence program can help write stories. But I've read long ago about programs that scriptwriters use to help plot outlines and keep a handle on what's going on. This enables scriptwriters to create more complex plots. I don't know what these programs are called....maybe another reader does.
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
9/11/20, 12:50 AM
Freedom is one thing, it doesn't sound like anything has really changed. Another option might be if wearer makes a 100 percent sincere apology to whoever put it on & owner knows it is (maybe through a warm feeling or something) then collar would have had a positive change in that relationship. Myself, if somebody tossed a collar on my neck, I would never ask for it to be removed.