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9/10/20, 1:17 PM
> ...the power of the Great One seems to be able to make Murdock orgasm and more. > I really want to emphasize the "and more" part of your statement. The next time we see Murdock (chapter 13, I think), we'll see just how much more.
9/10/20, 1:12 PM
Really neat concept, and very hot! Loved the reveal that it had been going on so long he didn't have a job anymore. Something about that made the scenario even hotter. I wish the protagonist didn't lose his mind to the point that we don't get to see what's going on in there. I love when stories get into the sub's headspace and we get to read about their sensory experience while getting mindfucked. Also, a couple of logistics weren't super clear to me. Like, what was the distinction between what the dom had to do last time vs this time? Was there a difference in how easily the sub went under this time vs the last time vs the first time? You're hinting that there was, but the detail are fuzzy, and trying to figure it out kind of kicked me out of the fantasy. Regardless, I really liked this story. Great work! :D
nycboot
9/10/20, 12:43 PM
Totally agree with El Mexicano 4091. And I can tell you're aware of repeating yourself @absman420 so you never give us as detailed view of the transformation as in the earliest chapters (actually I think your description of Mike Milano's transformation in the stand-alone version is almost better than any of those in the series). I love how the power of the Great One seems to be able to make Murdock orgasm and more. Can't wait to read more (and j/o more!). :)
9/10/20, 12:13 PM
A very hot episode. How about a guy bullying a college nerd. The nerd becomes an uber muscle bear daddy and the bully his loyal cub? how about the simple chaos of going to the most jockish frat on a university campus and simply adding the phrase "The All Gay Frat" to the sign out front and watch the changes. The guys would all be hot gay jocks. I'm enjoying the series. Great Mpreg scene!
9/10/20, 11:46 AM
Points to you for using the negative space between lines to create pacing, solid story work as well. I've done hypnosis and in my experience text based hypnosis doesn't do much for me. Still, story well written, best of luck to you in the contest!
Ravenclaw
9/10/20, 9:31 AM
that was really good. cant wait for more.
9/10/20, 9:12 AM
I've been working on it every chance I got and the first chapter should be up soon as long as September doesn't become concentrated 2020 like August did. I had so many people who needed my help and so much that needed to be done that I could only get the time to work on this infrequently. Thanks for the offer but the editing is the thing that has been giving me the least problems. The biggest bottleneck has been my decision to divide up the first day into multiple chapters. Some scenes are easy to place but I keep changing my mind on which others should be placed where in between them. The first day is going to be 3 to 5 chapters depending on exactly which order I end up deciding on. My brain also gave me an idea for the pandemic challenge so I will need to devote more time to it this month due to the deadline. I will be publishing the first (and maybe second) chapter(s) before I switch over to it though. Can't work on a new challenge while this unholy monster still haunts my nightmares after all.
Anonymous
9/10/20, 8:33 AM
i love your work!!!
Fafa
9/10/20, 8:31 AM
Nice story love the transformations. Add some twink ones.
JuG
9/10/20, 8:29 AM
excellent!