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9/8/20, 6:44 PM
I really enjoy your writing - you have a great way of getting into the characters' headspace and making it very visceral. Similar to AnonDragon, the part of my literary psyche that is a greedy-ass bottom just wants *more* of this story - the intervening chapters, what comes next, etc. A few logical inconsistencies jumped out at me: - When Arjun said "so we're fucking equals," I really thought he was going to somehow flip both their switches and either make them both subs or somehow meet in the middle. Was he referring to the switch-flipping mechanic, or just giving Jake the honor of topping him while getting flipped? - It really wasn't clear to me when Arjun flipped, or if he was constantly vacillating between flipped/not flipped, or almost flipped, while getting fucked. The narration and his behaviour were ambiguous. - Also, why 6 months? Does the switch automatically flip back after that long? Can't Arjun flip his own switch? - Why would Jake have needed extra conditioning to flip back? As it was presented in ch1, I thought the switch was an on-off proposition. - Why was Arjun's switch in the same spot as Jake's, and why was Jake able to flip it? In ch1, he made it clear that every guy has one, but Jake's happens to be right in his ass, but that Arjun is one of the few with a talent for finding and flipping it. Those are nitpicks. I really enjoyed this entire story. Keep it up!
9/8/20, 5:24 PM
Yeah, especially that we are now reaching near 30 chapters. Path 2.2.2 is somehow before path 2.2 . So really links aren't a bad idea. Yeah, good guy Chad... That's notably why I ask about somebody doing a path already made. I just don't know what to do with him. I tried to make him a slight control freak in this chapter but it doesn't show too much. Well, I don't know what's gonna happen with Joey, but Will won't do anything Ryan doesn't ask for, so he definitively won't be trying to take the pendant again... If Ryan somehow ask something that has to be explained by magic, Will would tell him, but Will doesn't have any agency anymore. So Ryan would then be the one to chose to use the pendant. You can write something, but take you time. This story could wait 7 month between path 3.1.1 and path 3.4.2.2, it can wait for you to have a clear idea of what to do, and you seem to have thing IRL that slow down your writing. They should take priorities. The grandfather's gift can wait. I started writing path 3.1.2, Sam should be less nice on Ty and Ryan =)
9/8/20, 5:11 PM
What an incredibly hot story! I'm a big fan, Wrestlr.
9/8/20, 4:31 PM
That was great dude! I especially love how long you kept him under for his last session — I’ll admit, I’ve fantasized about something similar happening to me, even before the pandemic.
Zac
9/8/20, 4:14 PM
Daaaaamn, bro! A Wrestlr story never disappoints.
9/8/20, 3:20 PM
I live to serve the Virus.
9/8/20, 3:06 PM
Great ending to a great story. I love me some good ol southern boy hypnosis!
9/8/20, 2:51 PM
Er... Delicious1papaya... It's a story. You know - made up - fiction. There is absolutely no need for you to impose any kind of morality on it. Your second comment is all about what would happen if it was 'real life'. That's the point - IT'S NOT REAL LIFE! This story is 'Pawn', the writer's, first effort and I think he's done a pretty good job of it. I bet that it has turned on quite a few readers. Negative comments like yours are not only unnecessary; they stifle creativity. Imagine if George R. R. Martin had edited his 'Game of Thrones' series to remove any morally questionable actions. It would have all been about Cersei playing with her kittens and nothing interesting would have happened. The publishers would have turned it down. In any fiction you need conflict - it's the seasoning which makes a story worth telling.
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
9/8/20, 2:46 PM
I really love this relationship (& would love to be a collared part of it). You are doing a great job of breaking down resistance to where new life is being accepted. It is not possible to say what is right or wrong about this. That is another long debated topic that has been around for 50 years.
9/8/20, 2:11 PM
On a second thought, I'd also add that Cody no longer seems as the character with moral upper hand and what you're promoting with the story would actually in real life require counseling. (also, the parents would be probably liable for dereliction of duty to care for their child by now because he'd be in some serious distress as he can't feel safe nowhere and his "Master" is definitely NOT providing him with any sense of security or protection. If such a Master existed in real life BDSM, I hope the community would cast them out and intervene on behalf of the slave.