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9/8/20, 4:34 AM
I've got three chapters left. Does anyone have any thoughts on doing multiple endings (like two links in the last chapter, choose your own adventure style)? I've got one ending that I like, but another ending that's more sadistic that I also like. It feels kind of cheap to not decide on a single ending, but on the other hand some people might like to see two endings.
kidicarus002@gmail.com
9/8/20, 4:25 AM
i live to serve the virus
9/8/20, 4:21 AM
I really loved the first half of the story, which focuses on Aaron's mental and physical changes. I found the second half, with its AI-assisted sex scenes, to be kind of anticlimactic. Of course, it's important to have a little bit of sex at the end to show how Aaron's whole life now revolves around sex. But the focus of those scenes was no longer on Aaron's personality changes, which were the most important and hottest part of the story.
Jay
9/8/20, 3:38 AM
So "AI assisted" stories continue. What a disappointing - and disillusioning - trend. It's an extremely depressing lesson to learn, and one of the reasons I've retired as an author, but it's the truth, and it's never been clearer: Effort isn't rewarded, output is. And there is nothing the human author can accomplish, through any amount of blood, sweat, and tears, that can't be replicated by a robot. What a miserable thing to know.
swngbthways
9/8/20, 3:20 AM
I LOVE this series! I hope I'll be able to read what happens in six months! 😊
9/8/20, 3:06 AM
Loved it! A fun creative spin on the butterfly effect.
9/8/20, 2:45 AM
i live to serve the virus
9/8/20, 2:29 AM
Always enjoyed this story! I will avoid going back and reading the old version so I can enjoy the updated tales as they come out. Now I just need myself a big heaping help of Sheriff Lane and his titanic body! He's my favorite.
9/8/20, 1:53 AM
Really enjoyed it. I thought hopping from vignette to vignette to show the plan unfolding and hitting a variety of kinks was hot and smart. Nice job.
9/8/20, 1:39 AM
@Pawn: It doesnt have to be boring. You could add it as part of his humiliation, having to explain why he's wearing this ugly, tacky piece of jewelry and have he rest of his team make fun of him for it. But yeah, its not like this plot point HAS to be in the story for me, but it would've been a nice justification to have. It's okay, don't worry about, its just a next level detail that couldve added some extra depth to your story