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9/7/20, 3:58 PM
> When this story first came out, i had a friend that I had a huge crush on join the army, and I always pictured him as the jarhead that gets transformed- that fantasy has gotten me off many times in the past > For me, there is no greater compliment. Honestly, knowing my stuff has gotten you off or caused you to fantasize your own variation makes me VERY happy! I hope I continue to inspire. > hopefully he will make an appearance in Book 2 > Absolutely! I have a whole subplot waiting for those guys!
9/7/20, 3:50 PM
@FantasyWithKinks - Hopefully it was a good interesting way and not a bad one! I’ve been experimenting lately with anchoring my stories in real physical locations, as opposed to ‘kinda-but-not-really-NYC-or-maybe-Chicago’, and it’s actually really helpful in getting some of the details right. Plus I like being able to picture the exact building or the exact street. Some of it is still a composition of other places I’ve known - the grocery store for example is based on one in another city, but I don’t think it affects the story negatively. The AI assistant definitely knows what it’s doing around sex. My sex scenes are usually short and bland, whereas the ai assist tends to get into the details. One of the experiments with this story was using the AI only where it’s demonstrated strengths in my other work, while handling the parts I’m best at myself.
9/7/20, 3:30 PM
I really liked parts of this story, and I feel like the technique for spreading the "virus" was very creative. But towards the end it just started to feel *aggressively* Utopian, like it didn't trust its readers to make up their own minds about whether these changes were a good thing or not. More showing and less telling would have helped here--for instance, showing us in greater detail how people like Xander become less neurotic and judgmental and more comfortable with their own bodies.
9/7/20, 3:18 PM
Nope. Hypnothrill is right -- I've done some editing and some cleaning, but nothing big, and no new additions to Book One. It was all there the whole time, hidden in plain sight!
9/7/20, 3:17 PM
would love a sequel!,
9/7/20, 3:09 PM
I don't think any of this is new, @nycboot (see https://archive2007.muscle-growth.org/stories/1717.html if you want to make comparisons). It's still VERY hot though.
nycboot
9/7/20, 3:00 PM
I've not gone back to the original version but the military involvement is totally new, yes? Your more detailed description of Bowden is wonderful. And I also like your description of how the plant is taking over Murdock (and presumably everyone else). In the original story you just had many take-overs, but now you describe what happens. Fabulous! Now I have to go relieve myself because the arousal is too much. :)
9/7/20, 2:49 PM
I live to serve the Virus
9/7/20, 2:37 PM
i always loved the part with the military. When this story first came out, i had a friend that I had a huge crush on join the army, and I always pictured him as the jarhead that gets transformed- that fantasy has gotten me off many times in the past, hopefully he will make an appearance in Book 2!
FantasyWithKinks
9/7/20, 2:26 PM
I had to take a moment to check if there was another gay Davie Street in another North American city when I started lol. For some reason, having a specific location for a story rather than Anywhere, America hit different for me. Like, I've probably been to whatever club you imagined at the end of the story. Assuming Aaron went to school in Van, I have definitely seen the buildings some of the scenes happen in. It changes the vibe of the story in a really interesting way. It's interesting to know that you used the AI assistant for some of the sex. The semi-randomness of events in the Vanilla series kind of confused me, but it's pretty clear that the assistant knows what it's doing with sex stuff. And, obviously, your awesome writing every time.