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Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
9/4/20, 12:07 AM
Nice addition of piss here. I wish somebody would make me a slave like that. Hopefully parents are clueless & not notice any changes.
9/3/20, 11:38 PM
Definitely like this vignette style of storytelling; it reminds me of the serial books in 17th and 18th Japan minus the ad pages. Looking forward to seeing what you have in store for the army unit.
boy Jason
9/3/20, 9:04 PM
Can I please get directions to Dicksburg and the phone number for the motel so I can make a reservation ?
9/3/20, 7:40 PM
@BateFan If you send me a draft of the next installment before you post it, I can help you "Southern fry" some of your dialogue.
9/3/20, 7:06 PM
@Hypnothrill and Malskin Noted! I suppose the reason behind that is I feel like I wouldn't be good at it? and I guess I'm not sure how even best to bring the southern accent to life. I can try in the next installment!
9/3/20, 6:57 PM
Looooved this. Great conclusion to the story!
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
9/3/20, 6:24 PM
Public humiliation is a major turn on for me, especially your touch of having it broadcast as you did. Maybe next time, it will be a live streamed event.
9/3/20, 5:49 PM
That was a super sweet story, Wesley! I loved the evolution of the protagonist through his corruption to, in the end, have a heartwarming ending where he united with the commander as a family!
9/3/20, 5:26 PM
@Pawn, the character arc doesnt even have to be that extreme or anything. You can show some small indications that Alex is getting resigned to his fate. Like for example maybe he stops getting mad about jerking off to gay porn as he's just used to getting turned on to it by now, or maybe he's starting to backtalk a lot less. Your teaser for this end chapter is pretty interesting too, because having a third person knowing about Alex's predicament introduces some new potential dynamics with this John character. So your story has a lot of potential! If youre having any problems and concerns, shoot me a message or a comment. Maybe I can provide you with more suggestions
Anonymous
9/3/20, 4:52 PM
Fucking hot!