Recent Comments

Alex Later
8/29/20, 12:36 PM
Thanks for all the positive comments, English is not my native language, so I screwed up a bit, depending on the on-line translator, but I will definitely use Grammarly
8/29/20, 12:35 PM
I'll take that! I agreed with you back when I originally chose to finish this series, that when you give a character absolute power, there is very little that can stand in their way. That being said, a some people wanted me to continue the story, so I thought I took it in the most natural direction that I could. We got to see a few different perspectives on life post-Jafar, all the while knowing that he was going to win - it was an inevitability. But I enjoyed the ride... I'm in the process of putting together a story where a different author writes each chapter - in order to try to increase my writing skills and creativity... it'd be great to have some talented writers involved, if you're interested?
8/29/20, 12:29 PM
Oh, so that's the explanation for the hooker, good! We starting to see Jay take a bit more pro-active role, but he is still the chew toy of everyone else. Please continue, this is a really good story!
8/29/20, 12:29 PM
I'll preface my comments by saying that I'm not a big fan of this genre; if you've got an antagonist or protagonist who can change reality with the blink of an eye, then I have a hard time caring what happens, since the other characters' actions no longer seem to matter. That's basically the problem I had with this conclusion as well. That said, I really have enjoyed this series as a whole. Along the way, you had some really nice transformation and world-changing scenes, especially near the beginning of Jafar's reign.
8/29/20, 12:27 PM
Oh! I'm sorry; it was clearer in my head than it must have been when written; when Jake/Jafar and Marcus are back on stage, he still has his new cock, and his muscle. Jafar/Jake allowed him to play with reality - just to see what Marcus would cook up; their disappointment was in how safe he'd chosen to be - imagine wanting to change something about yourself for your entire life; changing it and winding up EXACTLY the same?! Marcus has no imagination; so Jake/Jafar showed him what he could have had... and then took them back to the stage where he'd just been given his dream peen.
EJG
8/29/20, 12:20 PM
Oh how wonderful and horny this story was. Thoroughly enjoyed it. But one little thing took a bit of shine off 4 me.. any allusions to bestial/werewolf changes and what a shame you took away Marcus' muscles and cock. That last chapter of him growing was so freaking hot. But still, thats my own picky thoughts. Was a masterpiece anyhow.
Evan
8/29/20, 11:23 AM
Fantastic concept, very hot. And awesome you for putting up something not in your native language. That's tough. I know little about it but I'm not sure that AI assist is your friend here. A few times the story changed from the reader observing action to having something happening to them ("you/your"). Perhaps someone in the community can help with format and proofing. All the same, you published a story and that takes a lot of guts. And, to say it again, the idea is super hot. I'd love to see more.
Anonymous
8/29/20, 8:47 AM
Oh well. Seems its at an end (for now?). Shame. Hot stuff for the moasochist in me
8/29/20, 8:44 AM
I enjoyed the slow build up through this story and anticipation about what memories might be implanted. Great climax but it definitely left me wanting more!