Recent Comments

Nick C
8/29/20, 9:34 PM
hot creative idea. nice descriptions of the environment and action. i like
8/29/20, 8:33 PM
i love the way the story ended, giving people a sliver of hope just to entertain the new god. though they will never win itll give them spice of life.
Aug 23, 2020
8/29/20, 6:48 PM
I'm PRETTY sure that Twinkbot is a real boy, but i'm not sure... And I LOVE that. The bait and switch at the end of the chapter was a tad sudden, but I'm down to know what happens next if you don't want to end it there.
Anonymous
8/29/20, 6:47 PM
Keep it up! Love this story.
Aug 25, 2020
8/29/20, 6:38 PM
This is such an interesting story! I love how it opens up the universe so well with so little. The government sanctions this place, but there are still detractors that just get processed and silenced. it's fantastic!
8/29/20, 5:32 PM
Ah, I missed this one <3 The break at the end reminds me of Stacy's dad, not really a fan but you do you~
8/29/20, 3:28 PM
Great work HL! I enjoyed the ride and I think that even if Jafar was all-powerful and therefore, the one to win eventually, the whole trip was an amazing adventure. The waiting for each new chapter was compensated by well-written descriptions and a variety of interesting and captivating transformation scenes. Every time I though I knew what was coming next, I was surprised by an unexpected but very pleasant turn of events. Jafar's win was obvious from the very beginning, but I didn't read the story for its end, I read it because I was interested in the way the characters would evolve, get together, fight for each other, and since we are talking about spiral stories, eventually be corrupted and turn into something else, something new. Thank you for this great story and I hope we will soon read something new from you. Good luck for the future!
8/29/20, 3:18 PM
I am super interested in where this is going. Love the look into the separate lives of the men and i can't wait to see what happens next.
8/29/20, 2:41 PM
The mindset scenes were great. The sex scenes wwre fantastic. The pov switches were well done. The potential plot of owning a gym is very cool. That said, the breakdown at the end was less than interesting to. Not a fan of that at all.
8/29/20, 1:50 PM
more please