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8/29/20, 12:25 AM
that was a good story, but I don't like messing with people messing with moral compasses
Alex Lat
8/28/20, 10:35 PM
@Hypnothrill , thank you for taking the time to read, I am a big fan of your work, A Very Meaty Christmas is my favorite, and I will take everything into consideration for the next time. Thank you for reading
8/28/20, 9:23 PM
The concept here is good. It's just too rushed. There needed to be some more world-building at the beginning, so the reader got a clearer sense of the situation Aaron was in and what he had witnessed (seeing friends and neighbors transform into muscle zombies). And then it would have helped to have spent more time building the relationship between Aaron and Caleb, since that becomes important in the final part of the story. One last suggestion: rather than having a POV switch 2/3 of the way through this chapter, it would have worked better to have just saved Caleb's story for Chapter 2.
8/28/20, 8:58 PM
This story pushed all the right buttons for me. Awesome work!
8/28/20, 7:44 PM
Benjamin's transformation couldn't come soon enough!!!
8/28/20, 6:21 PM
This series is hitting kinks I knew I had and uncovering new ones, and all the more hot for how well it's written! Kinda relating to Trent right now but I second the others in that I hope he comes out the other side of this a bit more likable, poor Barry. How many parts left?
8/28/20, 5:04 PM
Extremely good and a well paced story that engages the reader and plays with unusual aspects you wouldn't normally expect.
8/28/20, 3:14 PM
Really nice one