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Aug 23, 2020
Martin
8/25/20, 8:27 PM
Is there going to be another chapter?
Vlh
8/25/20, 6:46 PM
i loved this story. I would love to see a story, using this style, on pantyhose or tights. :)
8/25/20, 6:34 PM
Really enjoying this take on a dumbing down story. I sure hope Barry took that key to his exam with him.
8/25/20, 5:00 PM
@Hypnothrill - Heh, okay, I didn't specifically mean to make that connection with the Instagram brunches, but that's a brilliant take. You'll notice that there's no mention of Instagram is the scenes after Vanilla leaves California. There's absolutely social media in hell, but in my mind, it's just Facebook. @Malskin - Ever since I figured where they were going, I've had this mental image of Hudson surfing a lava wave. Had to fit it in there. So far as the colour of Smokey's uniform goes, once he got to hell, he switched it out for a pure black rubber version with a reflective red stripe down the sides of the pants. Just looks better under a red sky.
8/25/20, 4:50 PM
@Lusty Stallion - Thank you sir! I knew the army was coming, and I knew they were gonna change, but until I started writing the scene I didn't realize that it was going to be a crowd transformation scene. Thanks for the inspiration there. @Jockmorphr - Glad you enjoyed it! It's weird - I originally intended to do this just as a story about mental warping due to the strangers pheromone, the physical changes just sort of... flowed out of it. Glad you enjoyed the end of it, I was worried it wouldn't come out properly, but it seems like everyone is getting it. Yeah, regarding Derek: that's absolutely me inserting myself into the story. With over 30 men transformed through the series, I felt like it wasn't too far out of line to visit Vanilla myself and see what the stranger could do to me. And if I'm gonna be there, I may as well get fucked into my most lustful desires. As for the baseball cap thing, I wear one most days myself, and I always check out a guy when he's wearing one.
8/25/20, 2:53 PM
Oh no, a short shopping interlude... *takes the entire rest of the rpg session*
8/25/20, 2:26 PM
I love how this story flips the script and that his intelligence varies. A very creative curse!
8/25/20, 1:48 PM
I'd love to read more of Benji's story! this was amazing too, but I'd love to see how far he's declined.
Aug 25, 2020
8/25/20, 1:36 PM
The world building and ideas here are great! I found the narrator's voice and the conversational style a bit distracting at times, but soon it hit a nice rhythm! Looking forward to more!
8/25/20, 12:27 PM
nice, who is next, a newbie becoming a bodybuilder?