Recent Comments

8/25/20, 9:46 PM
Thank you for the comments, everyone. I'm definitely considering a sequel. Hopefully the writing in the first-person, present-tense isn't too clunky - I'm really trying to bring the reader into the experience and make him feel like he's a participant in the story, rather than just an observer. If there are places where I can improve on this please let me know!
8/25/20, 9:30 PM
Nicely done.
Martin
8/25/20, 9:15 PM
> I really enjoyed the first half with the guy on the phone. i wouldve loved to follow him as he got processed. not as into all the drag stuff though. This!
Aug 25, 2020
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
8/25/20, 8:52 PM
Nice piss story, wish I ran into some strangers like that.
Aug 25, 2020
Speaks
8/25/20, 8:47 PM
always great to see your work, Brock. was re reading True Life just the other day.
Anonymous
8/25/20, 8:41 PM
great work
Aug 23, 2020
Martin
8/25/20, 8:27 PM
Is there going to be another chapter?
Vlh
8/25/20, 6:46 PM
i loved this story. I would love to see a story, using this style, on pantyhose or tights. :)
8/25/20, 6:34 PM
Really enjoying this take on a dumbing down story. I sure hope Barry took that key to his exam with him.
8/25/20, 5:00 PM
@Hypnothrill - Heh, okay, I didn't specifically mean to make that connection with the Instagram brunches, but that's a brilliant take. You'll notice that there's no mention of Instagram is the scenes after Vanilla leaves California. There's absolutely social media in hell, but in my mind, it's just Facebook. @Malskin - Ever since I figured where they were going, I've had this mental image of Hudson surfing a lava wave. Had to fit it in there. So far as the colour of Smokey's uniform goes, once he got to hell, he switched it out for a pure black rubber version with a reflective red stripe down the sides of the pants. Just looks better under a red sky.