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8/25/20, 2:24 AM
@anon - Thank you sir! @Hypnoguy67 - Yeah. It just felt like the right way to end it, showing off how everybody gets to continue in their happy kinked up lives. I don’t plan to revisit the end, but when a story starts with a stranger coming to town, it felt like the right bookend. @anon2 - Thanks for powering through. At just north of 66k words, this is the longest thing I’ve ever written. @Tempest888 - Aw thanks bro, I’m blushing. Glad you enjoyed the plot buildup, the vignettes really helped break it into distinct acts for me, and I’m stoked it worked. And don’t worry — I’ve got pizza and weed, I’m takin’ the night off.
Aug 22, 2020
8/25/20, 12:12 AM
Cool story, brainiax! Very imaginative with lots of details to put you in the scene.
8/24/20, 11:33 PM
This whole series was amazing! I know you said you used the help of an AI story generator, but this blew my expectations out the window. It was a rollercoaster from start to finish. The main thing I loved about this whole series was that it wasn't just mindless sex like the majority of the stories on here. It had a steady plot and you kept building with every chapter. I hope to see you bring back Joey in the future, if possible. Honestly, I cannot wait for your next piece, just be sure to take a break cause i'm sure it wasn't easy coming up with all of this.
Anonymous
8/24/20, 11:28 PM
This story was the best seven hours of my life. It was the only seven hours of my life! Maximum Derek!!
8/24/20, 11:25 PM
I love how you concluded the story with more vignettes. The ending sets up the premise for another series that I hope you write sometime if you are so inspired. Incredible work!
8/24/20, 11:10 PM
Oh a cop scenario is definitely on my mind, I just haven't gotten around to write it yet! Remember Uncle Ray and his son Mike from the Superbowl chapters....? ;) Stay tuned!
Anonymous
8/24/20, 11:08 PM
wonderful
8/24/20, 9:39 PM
Love. This. Story. Please write more!
8/24/20, 9:07 PM
@MalSkin - Thanks man! I love it when I find out people are reading every day. Makes me feel like I've done my job right. There's one more chapter awaiting approval, just a little epilogue to put a bow on things and make a few of you scream at me. I wanted to portray the stranger as fundamentally a likable and good person. I think there's a lot more complexity than just 'good' and 'evil', no matter how we approach it. I strongly believe that everyone is the hero in their own story, and so from his perspective, this is a good story about making people happy and returning home. From another perspective, this would be a horror story, akin to invasion of the body snatchers.
8/24/20, 8:46 PM
Yeah I agree, the Benji cake is baked. But the frosting for me would just be to see his Daddy pick him up. Seeing his eyes light up finally meeting his daddy and to see what kinda dom Daddy is in person if hes gonna be sweet or strict. Could just be done from a different pov supervising adoption day. The way you write conditioning really hits the spot!