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8/19/20, 7:10 PM
I brought up John is a Good Boy and short is good
8/19/20, 6:46 PM
I knew I was going to get that critique. Someone in the "Master of the House" thread brought up Hypnonail's 1999 story ["John is a Very Good Boy"](https://mcstories.com/GoodBoy/GoodBoy.html) which is the same length as this (2000 words). And as I reread it, I found myself feeling nostalgic for some of those early gay mind control stories which managed to pack a lot of action and intensity of language into a short amount of words. Partly because of the pacing, Hypnonail's story turns me on in ways that Swizzington's story unfortunately does not. However, I do think you have to read a short piece like this one differently than you would read a 8000 word chapter. There's not a lot of filler here, so you have to read it more like poetry than technical prose.
8/19/20, 6:41 PM
I liked this! wouldve l
8/19/20, 6:38 PM
when will we see the firefighters?
8/19/20, 5:03 PM
@anon Thanks - you'll find a few underwear fetishes scattered throughout the story.
Anonymous
8/19/20, 4:56 PM
I’m a massive fan of some of your “homage” pieces so it pains me to say this, but in this instance I’m not sure you’ve hit the mark. I get that you’re trying to capture the essence of the original work and condense it down to a shorter story, but the reduced work count means that key story beats end up feeling rushed
Swizzington
8/19/20, 4:48 PM
Tom, probably not :-) My philosophy is: "write the stories you would enjoy reading," and personally, I don't like stories that have photos attached. I find it distracting. Plus I like to give the reader wiggle room in how they imagine the characters.
Tom
8/19/20, 4:36 PM
Dunno if this is possible, would you ever consider including some photos every now and again in your stories? Just some standard ones from google/websites that show how the outfit could potentially look?
8/19/20, 4:10 PM
This second chapter was really hot to read. I hope you keep making new chapter's. I want to know who the mystery person is at the end.
Anonymous
8/19/20, 3:45 PM
Great story Perhaps you could include underwear/lingerie fetishes or an abdl twist