Recent Comments

Zac
8/19/20, 9:19 PM
Love it! The subjects moaning "I SUBMIT" when their programming is complete is HOT! Sorry we missed the recruitment of the brother and dad, and would have loved some added sex between the subjects.
8/19/20, 9:15 PM
@darkblade2814 - Impatient, huh? We'll get to them.
8/19/20, 9:07 PM
I'm very confused by the slippage in gender pronouns and signifiers when describing Alexei. Is this an adaptation of an M/F or F/F story that needs more editing?
Martin
8/19/20, 8:55 PM
@UchihaDEMS: Since you didn't seem to respond, I published and approved this story in your community series, I hope you don't mind. Let me know if you have any objections. Martin.
Swizzington
8/19/20, 7:47 PM
Actually, of all the things you listed, the only one that doesn't interest me is musky smells. Indeed, shaving is one of my main interests :-)
8/19/20, 7:41 PM
All fair critiques, Swizzington. But I think this story's going for fetishes that you're not really into, not only shaving and body hair, but also musky smells, muscle, and cum. It also doesn't have a humiliation element, which I know is something that you tend to include, but that is a real turn-off for me. Literally, I think it's different strokes for different folks!
8/19/20, 7:16 PM
The punishment 'Ding' was a great plot device! Loved the story!
8/19/20, 7:10 PM
I brought up John is a Good Boy and short is good
8/19/20, 6:46 PM
I knew I was going to get that critique. Someone in the "Master of the House" thread brought up Hypnonail's 1999 story ["John is a Very Good Boy"](https://mcstories.com/GoodBoy/GoodBoy.html) which is the same length as this (2000 words). And as I reread it, I found myself feeling nostalgic for some of those early gay mind control stories which managed to pack a lot of action and intensity of language into a short amount of words. Partly because of the pacing, Hypnonail's story turns me on in ways that Swizzington's story unfortunately does not. However, I do think you have to read a short piece like this one differently than you would read a 8000 word chapter. There's not a lot of filler here, so you have to read it more like poetry than technical prose.
8/19/20, 6:41 PM
I liked this! wouldve l