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8/17/20, 3:16 PM
I thought it entirely plausible that Levi should be hypnotized so easily. He struck me as the unimaginative and practical type that would take life as it is, based on what authority says, rather than as it could be in a range of possibilities. So if another convincing authority came along, he would listen to, and take on, that voice. The question for me is, where does it go from here? I am naturally drawn to humiliation and degradation, in particular of people with a high social status. So that would interest me. Would it interest Austin? How non-vanilla are the happy couple and how non-vanilla could they be?
8/17/20, 3:13 PM
Swizzington, you should write what excites you. But to my mind, the idea of a Blaine/Ryland prequel is a lot less appealing than some of the other possibilities for expanding the universe of this story. One thing I really liked about this chapter is that Blaine's presence is more muted. He's not quite as overtly obnoxious as he was in Chapter 1, and in many scenes he's just sort of a sinister background presence. I think that goes a long way towards making the story genuinely erotic, rather than "Okay, the mind control elements are hot, but I want to punch the hypnotist in the face."
8/17/20, 2:47 PM
Great story! I liked the mystery around Tim and the hotel, and that there was a bit of surprise at the end. I was expecting he’d get back into his vehicle and still crash and die. Well done!
Swizzington
8/17/20, 2:17 PM
Also, I was toying with the idea of writing a prequel with Blaine and Ryland in their dorm. Basically expanding on the brief story that Blaine tells Levi in this chapter. Is this something people would be interested in? I'm wary that it might be one of those things that is simply better left to the imagination of the reader :-)
Swizzington
8/17/20, 2:13 PM
Yeah, I think that's totally fair, given how it's written and what we've seen so far. For me, Levi might be smart in a conventional way - he's good with numbers - but in another way he's lacking. Unlike Austin (who basically *allowed* himself to be hypnotized, until it was too late to turn back once he changed his mind), Levi has no imagination whatsoever. And so, he can't imagine the possibility that Blaine really could hypnotize through a pre-recorded video. His mind just can't conceive that as a thing that could happen. While the other characters are just inventions of my puny mind, Levi is actually based on a real person that I know. He's very smart and logical in some ways, but he is also incredibly dumb and gullible in others :-) And I think that comes from: 1) a lack of imagination, as I said. 2) an overconfidence in his intellect and invulnerability. Something that I probably should have done a better job communicating in the text in this idea that: "Well yeah, maybe *Austin* could get hypnotized, but let's be real, I love the guy but between the two of us, there's no doubt I'm the smarter one in the relationship. There's no way *I* could be..." And ultimately, this is what I find so hot about hypnosis. The idea that once it's started, once you allow yourself to watch the swinging crystal for even a few moments....that's it, your fate is sealed. It might take another ten minutes for the induction to complete, but if you allow yourself to get drawn in for even a SECOND, it's already too late. Once it's started, the person doesn't realize there's a problem, until they're so sucked into it that they can no longer pull themselves out. And that's what I was going for here. Blaine is such a naturally talented hypnotist that it only takes a brief moment of participation in his induction, and then it's all over... :-)
8/17/20, 1:02 PM
I really enjoyed how the submissive was made to top/be a switch. I honestly wish there were more submissive tops in the stories, 'cause I think it's hot when a guy who's supposed to be a top, and in control, end's up becoming someone else's living dildo. It's literally a mindfuck, when a guy's dick (which is supposed to be synonomous with a guy's pride and dignity), is reduced to being the property of someone else, and meant to be only used at another's leisure. Add in the fact that the subtop is bigger, more masculine in a physical way, is a hunk, has a big dick, *and* is straight? God that's hot. I really, *really* like what you've done so far.
8/17/20, 1:00 PM
I'm enjoying the story so far but I Don't like how easily Levi fell for it, idk makes him look incredibly stupid to keep watching even after witnessing first hand what it had done to his husband and takes me out of it quite a bit.
8/17/20, 12:10 PM
I just went back and looked at that chapter. You only mention a Matt?
8/17/20, 11:18 AM
Enjoyed this very much!!! I hope you continue!