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Jockmorphr
8/17/20, 6:39 PM
A nice and exciting surprise. I really enjoyed nipple play as a topic for a story and would love to see more. Seduction stories like this one are always hot. In particular I'd love to follow Dave as he dives deeper into the fetish, and what its like as his nipples grow. It would be hot to hear the reactions from his straight buddies as his nips get bigger and more prominent on his pecs. Dave might even succeed in seducing someone on his own!
Anonymous
8/17/20, 6:38 PM
another great chapter! you really have such an interesting and unique style of writing. Im really enjoying this story and believe its shaping up to be one of the best. the only thing that left me wanting more was the decision to fade to black on Levis induction. Austins mental takeover was so absolutely hot in the first chapter and Levis denial of it was so absolute that it seemed like an odd choice to not have us see first hand his experience. that being said i know there is still a chapter remaining and your motivations for that could totally be explained in upcoming details. either way what an absolute treat of a story! I cant wait for chapter 3! Any idea when it will be out? My thumb is getting tired from refreshing the page so much in anticipation :)
8/17/20, 6:12 PM
@ Jonanator and @boyn2changes This is all I had planned for the story, but if you'd give me some more ideas on where you'd like me to take the story I'll see what I can kick around.
EJG
8/17/20, 6:09 PM
Great story...until you featured the bestial/werewolf changes. Had it not been for that, would be thoroughly enjoying your Jafar series.. Sorry to the furry/werewolf cliche fans here,but thats not 4 me. Does'nt mean i still don't enjoy it.!
Helloitsme
8/17/20, 6:05 PM
I think what I love about this is how small things from chapter 1 and the start of 2 come through until the end of this chapter so there is a really good cohesion! , also loving the repeat of the word sloppy :p I love how levi got under, the scene you did with Austin was really hot but equally how you handled levis induction was also amazing. And how we (the reader) got tastes of how it affected him in every so slight ways e.g. He didn't untuck his shirt after work or take off his tie, he wanted to be clean shaven like Austin to be less 'sloppy'. It all just works so amazing!! I also love how it's such a fantasy, like I'm reading this and I would 'love' to be made into a slave like Austin but then in reality no one really wants that. It jsut gets me going so much! You are a master at writing these types of things! I'd definitely rather have an expansion of other stories before the prequel to this, saying that Id 100% happy with whatever you decide as it's gana be amazing!
8/17/20, 5:30 PM
Love the detail behind the mental decay and reconditioning...it'd be awesome to see this continue!
8/17/20, 5:20 PM
@Lytcom - Huh, you're totally right! I got that confused in my head, thanks for pointing it out. 🚨 Retcon alert: I've updated "Sam" in this chapter to "Matt" to bring it in sync with Bottoms Up at the Bar. 🚨
8/17/20, 4:49 PM
I love reading all of the comments, and the story, too! I hate Blaine as well, ha ha, but a "classic" induction (swinging crystal, repetitive patter) was what first awakened my erotic interest in hypnosis, so that aspect is amazing. As to Levi's blinders, I think Swizzington did a good job explaining that Blaine used a little NLP during the dinner party to keep him from interfering with Austin's hypnosis. That, plus the arrogance/dismissal of Blaine described above, explains why he didn't act until it was too late. What will happen next? :O
8/17/20, 3:16 PM
I thought it entirely plausible that Levi should be hypnotized so easily. He struck me as the unimaginative and practical type that would take life as it is, based on what authority says, rather than as it could be in a range of possibilities. So if another convincing authority came along, he would listen to, and take on, that voice. The question for me is, where does it go from here? I am naturally drawn to humiliation and degradation, in particular of people with a high social status. So that would interest me. Would it interest Austin? How non-vanilla are the happy couple and how non-vanilla could they be?
8/17/20, 3:13 PM
Swizzington, you should write what excites you. But to my mind, the idea of a Blaine/Ryland prequel is a lot less appealing than some of the other possibilities for expanding the universe of this story. One thing I really liked about this chapter is that Blaine's presence is more muted. He's not quite as overtly obnoxious as he was in Chapter 1, and in many scenes he's just sort of a sinister background presence. I think that goes a long way towards making the story genuinely erotic, rather than "Okay, the mind control elements are hot, but I want to punch the hypnotist in the face."