Recent Comments

Anonymous
8/10/20, 5:23 AM
This was so hot!! Maybe in a later scene julio can pick up that priest again and get a little closer ;) i can't wait for the next chapter.
8/10/20, 5:06 AM
This is getting more enthralling with each installment, keep up the god wrk!
8/10/20, 4:36 AM
I love this. I really like stories where various guys are transformed in different ways, especially when they're given different fetishes. Very cool.
8/10/20, 4:19 AM
Oh man, I didn’t even think to double check that the AI and I were using consistent spelling for Jonny’s name. Good call out, I’ll be more careful about that. I’m not worried that fiction writers are going to be replaced by AI anytime this year. There’s too much structure and editing required to get really usable text out of it. That said... it’s actually a lot of fun to write with. It feels like a good brainstorming partner when you don’t have to worry about ego around rejection and rewriting. For that reason, I’m gonna keep churning out entries in this series while I learn more about where I can lean on it and where I have to bring the goods myself. For anyone who’s following this experiment, here are some things I did differently in chapter 2: - I let the AI handle a lot of the incidental dialog, but anything that changed the plot direction, I tended to refine and rewrite. - I was more proactive about steering the plot. For example, the AI came up with Jonny’s football obsession (including his Mom’s concerns!), but I decided to move it earlier in the story, before we got to his hair. It made more sense for the hair to be a consequence of the football, so I shifted the story structure around to accommodate it. - In some areas, I prompted the AI to say quite a lot about a topic (the haircut), and then trimmed it down to my favourite sentences, adding in the connective tissue as required.
8/10/20, 4:06 AM
Nice! I like the way we get an embedded narrative with the priest telling the erotic fantasy he has about his parishioners.
8/10/20, 3:53 AM
I think this chapter worked a lot better, especially towards the end when Jonny/Johnny gets fetishes for football and spandex. At the beginning, we were still getting some choppy, mechanical passages like: "Jon complied with my orders. 'Turn around' Once again, he complied."
8/10/20, 3:24 AM
Been enjoying your contributions so far this year, all have been focused. fresh, new ideas, and well written, but this on is my favorite. There's something about the idea of 'is there something on my face' that really has a lot of potential.
Spiral Fan
8/10/20, 1:06 AM
Waiting for the climax where the game finish and completely change their identity. And they make an orgy copulation!
Spiral Fan
8/10/20, 12:47 AM
Creative and hot as fuck!! love the idea of game that can slowly change guy into queer. Will read the next chapters!
8/9/20, 11:32 PM
@Nutiper - that's a great point. AI Dungeon has some ability specify which facts are 'remembered', so I think I'll try that in the third chapter and see if that helps the build up a bit. The second chapter is already done and waiting approval.