@Nutiper - that's a great point. AI Dungeon has some ability specify which facts are 'remembered', so I think I'll try that in the third chapter and see if that helps the build up a bit. The second chapter is already done and waiting approval.

Exciting to see you experiment with this! I did sense something "off", like others have mentioned, and I sometimes felt like I could tell the Derek parts (hot!) from the AI parts (0̸̛̯̙͎̭͓̣̱̞̲̝̜͖̗̜̋́͌̋̅̓͑͗̚͜1̷̱͉̯̳͔̬͓̤̈́̄̏̽̓̿́̉́̒̊͠0̶̨͎̺̟͙̭̈́̓ͅ0̷̹̠̻̬̲̥͈̭̹̂͜͝1̴͓̱̭̙̭̱͚͈̟͔̺̳͈̽ͅ0̷̤̤͍̰̭̥̻̝̼͔̊̅͜0̵̟̣̰͉̮͎̝̠̰̳̠̋͗̀͜0̸̼͍͙͖͙̤͇̣̚!), so I was trying to figure out what it was exactly... This might not be the only thing, but what I noticed myself was that the AI in general is really bad at "flow" -- it has no memory of what happened in previous paragraphs, and no way to anticipate what might happen in later paragraphs either. But "flow" is one of your strengths as a writer, and also what makes so many of your stories so *hot*. Like, this gradual development of transformation... Evolving reactions of the people transformed, as they realize what they've gotten into... The way the character dynamics shift in subtle/realistic ways with every paragraph, as things accumulate and the situation intensifies... I guess what felt off sometimes was that the reactions and the resulting dialogue didn't always build that "flow" as cohesively -- sometimes they even disrupted a flow that was being built successfully for a moment. I think the characters also felt a bit less coherent for that reason. I mean, a character's dialogue and actions pretty much shape our understanding of them. So, if the dialogue and actions feel "off" (due to lack of memory/lack of flow), then I guess it makes sense that the characters might feel "off" as well... Maybe this is why some readers reacted to the story the way they did? Not sure... But, again -- this is definitely just one person's take, and I'm not sure I'm diagnosing this correctly at all! (Just because I can type a long paragraph about "flow" or whatever doesn't make me right.) I'd trust your gut here, and go with whatever your instincts are telling you. Either way, it's a super cool experiment, and I'm looking forward to the next chapters of the story!

Thanks for the feedback guys! I think I'm gonna keep using the AI assistance while I write this series, because I'm finding that it's taking me in directions that I wouldn't have gone otherwise. I'm definitely trying to learn how to get the best stories out of it, so please keep giving feedback about what you think it working and what isn't. I'll admit, I was super tempted not to tag it as 'ai assisted story', but I feel like this is a public experiment and I want to be upfront about what I'm trying here. I've got a short list of people that our mysterious stranger is going to meet in town. If you have any suggestions, drop a comment with them! I'm hoping that by the time I get a few of these stories into the series, I'll have smoothed out the rough patches when it comes to AI. @Cris Kane - Hah, that's a great idea, but not the one I'm doing right now. Maybe one day.

really a cool one!

I'm doing well but I've gotten a bit busy with other things. Hope you all are safe and sound too

Hey team, glad to see peole are still reading this. I'm slowly inching towards a new release to this story (with a heavy focus on the Chief). I've been hit by a sudden case of writer's block though. To the newest anon, and anyone else out there, if you want to do a collaboration or a commission, feel free to comment on any of my stories on here, or message me through my GSS profile. I'd love to find some way to get the ball rolling

This has a wonderful potential for a series. I think the grammar and spelling distracted me severely so I would encourage you to ask Martin or one of the more prolific authors to review and correct BUT NOT CHANGE the story. It must be yours and what a wonderful idea this is. Very original and sympathetic. The more potential and twists I see , the more I'm inspired to read. Very original and enjoyable!!

I must admit, I was expecting a meta story, where you and the AI battled over the writing of your story, with the AI trying to take the story in directions you didn't want. In the process, the AI would end up transforming not just the story but you as well.

Eh... not entirely, I think to edit out the obvious 'word generator' feel of these stories requires so much work the authors might as well just write them all themselves. Especially when they have your gift for language. This just left me cold.

I just posted a beautiful illustration my friend Max Spragovsky did of this story on the [FORUM](https://forum.gayspiralstories.com/t/king-rex-illustration/1773). Please look -- it's just awesome!