Recent Comments

8/9/20, 6:07 PM
This has a wonderful potential for a series. I think the grammar and spelling distracted me severely so I would encourage you to ask Martin or one of the more prolific authors to review and correct BUT NOT CHANGE the story. It must be yours and what a wonderful idea this is. Very original and sympathetic. The more potential and twists I see , the more I'm inspired to read. Very original and enjoyable!!
8/9/20, 4:43 PM
I must admit, I was expecting a meta story, where you and the AI battled over the writing of your story, with the AI trying to take the story in directions you didn't want. In the process, the AI would end up transforming not just the story but you as well.
8/9/20, 3:43 PM
Eh... not entirely, I think to edit out the obvious 'word generator' feel of these stories requires so much work the authors might as well just write them all themselves. Especially when they have your gift for language. This just left me cold.
8/9/20, 2:56 PM
I just posted a beautiful illustration my friend Max Spragovsky did of this story on the [FORUM](https://forum.gayspiralstories.com/t/king-rex-illustration/1773). Please look -- it's just awesome!
8/9/20, 2:28 PM
Fascinating developments. Please continue!
Anonymous
8/9/20, 2:16 PM
excellent
8/9/20, 2:15 PM
too many long sentences and paragraphs, it's hard for me to read. A shame, since based on the tags I would've loved this story
8/9/20, 2:11 PM
Great Story! Keep going!
Swizzington
8/9/20, 2:10 PM
Yeah I felt the same way. The writing just didn't hold my attention. Although in fairness, I would probably not have guessed it was an AI-generated story, if you hadn't mentioned it.
8/9/20, 1:34 PM
no offense but your story has too many mistakes. it's readable but it could be better. the dialogue sounds so unnatural; it's like one of those supervillain scenes where the hero is captured and is about to die by the hands of a laser beam or sharks. that's just my opinion