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Swizzington
8/9/20, 2:10 PM
Yeah I felt the same way. The writing just didn't hold my attention. Although in fairness, I would probably not have guessed it was an AI-generated story, if you hadn't mentioned it.
8/9/20, 1:34 PM
no offense but your story has too many mistakes. it's readable but it could be better. the dialogue sounds so unnatural; it's like one of those supervillain scenes where the hero is captured and is about to die by the hands of a laser beam or sharks. that's just my opinion
8/9/20, 1:11 PM
Great premise but there was something a bit flat about it. Not sure if it’s the AI but I noticed there were quite a lot of short sentences which seemed a bit weird and gave the story a kind of monotonous vibe. I’d love to see a follow up without the AI writing element.
8/9/20, 9:46 AM
Much more please. This seems like the beginning to something great.
8/9/20, 8:52 AM
I mean, I don't dislike this, but I feel like it's missing some of the linguistic verve and intensity that normally characterizes your stories.
8/9/20, 6:22 AM
please don't make darren a top, its rare to find stories with a old jock bully being the bottom, I would love to see darren becoming more and more submissive
8/9/20, 6:02 AM
After reading your story I got interested and was looking for some other stories with similar topic. But reading just a few I got mostly disappointed, sometimes even appalled. What I really like is that your story (aside from being super hot) is gentle and totally playful. 💜
8/9/20, 5:45 AM
Fantastic concept and writing. Will be thinking about this one for a while.
8/9/20, 3:44 AM
Shot two loads by the end of your story. You are a creative writer and very descriptive! Felt like I was there in the room with everyone. Storyline was hot and I need to find that salve!
Aug 4, 2020
8/9/20, 3:41 AM
I loved it. Will there be more chapters? :)