Recent Comments

8/9/20, 2:28 PM
Fascinating developments. Please continue!
Anonymous
8/9/20, 2:16 PM
excellent
8/9/20, 2:15 PM
too many long sentences and paragraphs, it's hard for me to read. A shame, since based on the tags I would've loved this story
8/9/20, 2:11 PM
Great Story! Keep going!
Swizzington
8/9/20, 2:10 PM
Yeah I felt the same way. The writing just didn't hold my attention. Although in fairness, I would probably not have guessed it was an AI-generated story, if you hadn't mentioned it.
8/9/20, 1:34 PM
no offense but your story has too many mistakes. it's readable but it could be better. the dialogue sounds so unnatural; it's like one of those supervillain scenes where the hero is captured and is about to die by the hands of a laser beam or sharks. that's just my opinion
8/9/20, 1:11 PM
Great premise but there was something a bit flat about it. Not sure if it’s the AI but I noticed there were quite a lot of short sentences which seemed a bit weird and gave the story a kind of monotonous vibe. I’d love to see a follow up without the AI writing element.
8/9/20, 9:46 AM
Much more please. This seems like the beginning to something great.
8/9/20, 8:52 AM
I mean, I don't dislike this, but I feel like it's missing some of the linguistic verve and intensity that normally characterizes your stories.
8/9/20, 6:22 AM
please don't make darren a top, its rare to find stories with a old jock bully being the bottom, I would love to see darren becoming more and more submissive