Recent Comments

8/1/20, 9:07 PM
hehe, I can see the Black Mirror comparative. Clever / ironic use of 1st person as a narrative device. Well done Sir.
8/1/20, 8:57 PM
very hot ending and was not thinking about changing their names like that. I found the other members in town hot would love to more added to this story form people for sure. Also I like how short each part was nice easy read and loved it.
8/1/20, 8:53 PM
Thanks for the feedback Hypnothrill! I keep looking for a proper balance in keeping a proper pace in the stories and explaining it all. This is my longest story so far, so I'm slowly getting to that sweet spot ;)
Nov 24, 2019
8/1/20, 8:51 PM
Juicy stuff
8/1/20, 8:49 PM
There are so many hot ideas in this story! I love the premise of this secret army filled with obedient, dumbed-down super soldiers. I just feel like the story needs more room to breathe. If it were closer to 10000 words, then you'd be able to spend more time on characterization, physical descriptions, creating suspense, and conveying how Andrew is feeling.
CMC
8/1/20, 8:48 PM
I loves all the little bits of Joes transformation!
transformheaven
8/1/20, 8:09 PM
You didn't disappoint, I really liked this story!
8/1/20, 7:43 PM
so hot seeing their minds, culture, religions, everything be washed away and brainwashed! love it and would love more like this from you!!
Drake Nightstrom
8/1/20, 7:07 PM
I really enjoy what you have so far. Keep going.
8/1/20, 5:22 PM
I wonder... if he cursed to do that to any guy fucking him? anyway, that was hot!