Recent Comments

7/26/20, 9:12 PM
Great exposition for a future tale. Descriptions and dialog are believable and interesting. I see there was criticism of your paragraphs but I didn't notice much wrong with them. Maybe what you are writing is more of a novel than a short story. i look forward to reading more.
7/26/20, 9:11 PM
> I swear that my last decade of personal growth has just been me giving in to my fantasies, one at a time. > In my opinion, that's a life well lived!
transformheaven
7/26/20, 8:32 PM
Good start! can't wait to see where this will go :)
7/26/20, 8:20 PM
HOT DAMN! Hypnothrill is back with a vengeance. I loved the story, and can't wait to see where it goes!...well, actually, I *know* where it's going (everyone ends up happily enslaved and horny for men), and yet getting there is always fun and incredibly sexy. That's what makes you a master, Hypnothrill!
7/26/20, 8:11 PM
very hot and can not wait for the next part.
Anonymous
7/26/20, 7:56 PM
i need a part 3 or way more to this!!!
7/26/20, 7:50 PM
You got me with this paragraph: >“I’m not going to make you into something you’re not, Strong,” the doctor said, taking a step toward me. I tried not to look at him. “I’m helping you be the thing you’ve always wanted to be. I’m releasing you from what stopped you. I’m showing you the truth hidden behind the inhibition. Isn’t that what you want? Isn’t that what every man wants, the fulfillment of personal fantasy?” I swear that my last decade of personal growth has just been me giving in to my fantasies, one at a time.
7/26/20, 7:07 PM
> God damn it, i wad worried that was going to happen. > There's nothing more satisfying for me than a reader having an emotional reaction to the work! It means I did my job.
7/26/20, 7:00 PM
God damn it, i wad worried that was going to happen. Should have been a dragon and kidnapped the Prince instead.
sepr23an
7/26/20, 6:30 PM
Still waiting for the next chapter. Please make it hotter and include a lot of pec, abs, and nipple worshipped!! and also harsh brainwashed scene