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7/25/20, 12:11 AM
> So basically Strong should have either run away with Prince (who based on this chapter might have actually done it), or at least took Prince with him as backup > See Chapter 25
7/25/20, 12:03 AM
The writing is good, but I'm a little confused. Jay comes off as a sadistic dude in the original series and doesn't care what happens to his stepdad. Yet here, he clearly cares about what happens with Mr. Turner, he even goes so far as to embrace him in a caring way. I think you need to establish where that change in Jay happens that makes him become a sadistic person, or explain why he care's so much for Mr. Turner. Side note, I personally thin Jay should put the twins under cause they seem like they're taking advantage of Jay, and I don't believe for a second that they deleted the video off their phone.
7/24/20, 11:15 PM
Damn fine print. LOL.
7/24/20, 11:13 PM
This whole Story reminds me of "Addicted to S.T.U.D.", which was the first story of yours i ever read. And that reminds me of the original "Total Recall" movie... So basically Strong should have either run away with Prince (who based on this chapter might have actually done it), or at least took Prince with him as backup (though that might have been putting him in too much danger). Fingers crossed for a happy ending, but like S.T.U.D. I'm more expecting an ambiguous or bittersweet one.
7/24/20, 11:06 PM
I felt bad that so many of you didn't like where I left this - so let's keep going? See if we can't make at least some of you happy.
nycboot
7/24/20, 10:36 PM
@HunkLover: Here's the iPad -so give it another crack!! And good luck.:)
7/24/20, 8:27 PM
>Feels like the calm before the storm. > WARNING! Climax ahead. Please lock seat belts in place and keep your arms in the car at all times
7/24/20, 8:27 PM
Steve, you would need re-read the notecard in Part 1 for your answer to that. It's intriguing how much of an impact twins has had on this series :P
7/24/20, 8:20 PM
not a fan of harry potter fanfic, so believe me when I say that I am pleasently surprised and look forward to this series
Anonymous
7/24/20, 7:57 PM
Literally just 2 episodes away from "the office" finale. This was a fun read. Thanks!