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Jul 23, 2020
7/24/20, 1:07 AM
I was kinda hoping for a full on Sense8 style orgy tbh buy this is fun too lol
7/24/20, 12:44 AM
I liked seeing the beginning of the negative with Jeff. I was rooting for Brian...oh no, maybe I'm jealous too. The dichotomy between Apollyon and the Fitness Factory was great. Both multi leveled facilities, but you made the levels so hot at Apollyon and so wretchingly annoying at Fitness Factory. I can feel the bad music. It was a fun read.
7/24/20, 12:42 AM
>We both agreed on the same person. And it was a quick answer. It is a compliment to your writing. > I love minor characters! They can be anything. My favorite is a character you'll meet in the very last chapter: Christian. On an unrelated note: I think everyone should be a server at some point in their life -- it teaches you how to treat other servers. (I also think everyone should try to teach!)
7/24/20, 12:03 AM
Oh, another note....I worked in a restaurant before covid came and did not go back. Not out of fear, just out of lack of desire. I read your paragraphs that include the interchange with the waiter, to a former co-worker, asking that person to say the first name of a server we work with that enters the mind. We both agreed on the same person. And it was a quick answer. It is a compliment to your writing.
7/23/20, 11:59 PM
I did love that line. Firstly how Woody said it so casually and secondly thinking of the dominant Prince becoming a wife or a slave, esp when he goes home to a woman. Switching teams, positions and mindsets.
7/23/20, 11:18 PM
> Every single moment in this story, I’m like ‘Strong, don’t do it!’, but then I’m also like ‘Yeah, that’s probably what I’d do too.’ > Yeah, me too. I mean, I know I'm not surprising anyone by confessing I'm the person Strong is based on. And, like Strong, I feel life sometimes sweeps me toward these weird situations where I'm in too deep before even realizing where I am. But, deep down, we all want what Strong wants...
7/23/20, 10:46 PM
Every single moment in this story, I'm like 'Strong, don't do it!', but then I'm also like 'Yeah, that's probably what I'd do too.' We're almost at the finish line. Let's see if Strong manages to defeat the boss level. Either way, I bet he's gonna love the outcome.
7/23/20, 9:42 PM
I hope this story continues
7/23/20, 8:01 PM
Please keep it coming, I'm into this!
7/23/20, 7:47 PM
Some strong opinions about how the story panned out, but that's only because people were so in to it! I loved this story and thanks for writing it! Maybe it didn't end the way I would have chosen, but that's OK of course. I love the idea of the phone/internet plotline. And I agree that there's not much that's hotter than a genie or man plotting out a plan to become a god.