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Jul 23, 2020
boi98229
7/23/20, 2:31 PM
Yes! i love everything about this story! i love the way the context was very realistically created out of the isolate-at-home situation. i love the way the main character got more and more in tune with his body - and his mind! i love the idea of being able to connect multiple minds and thoughts, creating a cosmic mind connection. i had trouble with the "mind control" rating since in every other story i've read, the control is coming involuntarily from an external dominant mind. This mind control came from within the character, which enabled him to telepathically connect with others - great idea! One option for taking this story forward (after the telepathic characters and their friendships were happily developed) would be to have an evil character join the group and use this situation to take control over the minds of the original circle of friends to mindfuck with them. i just hope that, wherever it goes, the story is continued. Thanks so much for great entertainment. Your story plot is almost analogous to your finding the mind control, focus and imagination as an author to write this story and connect with the rest of us as readers -- unfortunately without any telepathy actually involved - this time! Still, a very interesting experience! Thanks!
7/23/20, 2:12 PM
> I think that a couple dozen of the authors on this site should get together and write ‘how it’s written’ style pieces to talk about aspects of their work. I think it’d be a fascinating read, especially in a niche genre like this. > First of all, I applaud anyone who wants to write! And I really do think that the best way to learn how to write is by writing. That said, some of the best classes I took as an undergrad were writing workshops. (I ended up minoring in creative writing, but that's only because I took so many writing seminars that I accumulated the credits. It wasn't my intent.) My Humorous Writing professor was/ is brilliant -- she's still one of my mentors -- and my Short Story professor was so good that I did an independent study in Novel Writing with her. She was amazing at constructing plot and motivation. If I were to teach a "class" for the authors on this site, I think the first offering I would give would be "How to Write Exposition." New Authors tend to give it to us in one big lump, which is overwhelming and descriptions read more like technical writing than fiction. So I'll throw out this trick: try to start as deep in the action as you can and fill us in as you go along. If there's information we NEED to know to understand the character, demonstrate it, don't tell us. (The old "show don't tell" rule -- one of the hardest for new writers.) Discovery is far more powerful than exposition. My other bit of advice for new writers is "Read It Out Loud." Rhythm and cadence are very important. Sentences don't all need to be the same length -- read what you wrote aloud and if it's uncomfortable to speak, it's uncomfortable to read. I spend most of my time re-writing and drafting -- that's why I'm so slow to produce.
7/23/20, 2:11 PM
holy smokes,that is one hell of a game night
Magicsoul
7/23/20, 1:54 PM
Wao, I can't believe ONIX is my first comment, I'm a fan of you and your stories, thank you very much.
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
7/23/20, 1:13 PM
I would buy a 24 pack of that beer & pack as much as I could in a single night.
Jul 23, 2020
7/23/20, 12:41 PM
What a hot idea, and well-executed! Bravo!
Anonymous
7/23/20, 10:55 AM
WE NEED MORE!!!
Sep 19, 2016
7/23/20, 8:01 AM
I stumbled upon this story by accident and I was very glad that I did. This story seriously needs a sequel! If the author still exists, please come back and post an update!
giveintothemusk
7/23/20, 6:38 AM
😚👌
Jul 23, 2020
7/23/20, 5:49 AM
Now I want to hear the stories of the other guys.