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7/22/20, 3:06 PM
Definitely need more of this series
7/22/20, 1:53 PM
Glad to see this pop up in the archive stories. One of my favorite bro-ification tales.
nycboot
7/22/20, 1:40 PM
I liked so much of this story but I think it fell apart at the end because you asked too much of the audience. If an author starts a story laying out the ground rules (e.g. this is a genie who engages in magic) then the reader can accept that and go along with it. But once you start changing those rules and making more impossible demands it becomes more difficult for the reader to believe it. This reminds me of the problem with nearly all television shows. Unlike movies (which focus on plot), television shows focus more on character. Once their characters are established, most tv writers have a limited amount of possibilities for what their character can do. Everyone knows that once that has been exhausted, tv writers start introducing new characters so that their original creations will have something more to show. It's the sign that the writers have reach the limits of their creativity and that the series's end is due soon. Coming back to this story, I think you took a limited path by naming the series after Jafar. He's pretty one-dimensional. Jake on the other hand is young enough (and a little careless) that we experience multiple facets to his personality. He's the one that thinks freely, balancing common sense with his dick. I would go as far to say that Jafar and Jake's mind-meld is probably the only thing that made Jafar interesting. Ultimately I think Jake is a much more interesting character.
Dec 4, 2019
7/22/20, 1:30 PM
Very hot story. Wish such a transformation could happen to me irl.
7/22/20, 1:20 PM
I ended up liking this series way more than I thought I would and I can't wait for more.
7/22/20, 12:37 PM
Thank you so much - I know this might not have been the direction everyone would have wanted it to take, there were other ideas... but as I discussed with someone on the Discord; I just felt like after all the visions of Jafar taking over the world, I'd already written what the audience were waiting to see in the previous chapters - plus with Jafar as one of your central characters - it's never going to be a happy ending. You turn him good, he's no longer recognisable. You defeat him, he'll somehow come back again... I did what I really tried not to - wrote myself into a corner. But, what I wanted simply hadn't been written before and I thought I'd give it a bash. I tried to set up things with a little foreshadowing - the line Majid had about people being slaves to their phones and Jafar's new found love for the internet were going to come together as Jafar's influence spread... but I reached a point where I believed I'd be dangling a giant carrot whilst you collectively stroked yours. Again, thank you all so much for your support. I'm going to try to plan out a new story - rather than hitting the keys and seeing what happens.
7/22/20, 11:21 AM
BostonSatyr: I actually have the beginning segment of the following chapter written with an outline for a full story arc that, as you suggest, involves Duncan & Weiss being thrown together in a sprawling adventure delving into the underworld of this new altered world. I have been struggling to find time to write however, this chapter was the product of 48 hours frantic writing and I've not been able to devote that level of time again with lockdown lifting here in the UK. A Patreon is something that I'd never considered before, but would be a big incentive for a struggling author like me! I'll certainly give it some thought; if you're serious about the desire to contribute or would just like to speak a little about the direction of the series drop me an email, my address is 'gaty (dot) huge @ gmail (dot) com' - just remove the spaces and swap out the punctuation.
Johnthedoe
7/22/20, 9:15 AM
No worries the rewrite is currently in progress and there'll be plenty of sequels after the true ending of this story. I do have an entire world to take over after all.
Anonymous
7/22/20, 7:02 AM
Great chapter. Look forward to more stories
Anonymous
7/22/20, 5:53 AM
real interested to see whats happening inside him