I took a quick look at it. I do like how old school jrpg it is. I like how they displayed the "move selections". I'd definitely play that game! haha Star World would have sexual content, but wouldn't really be focused on it? Fortunately bad (good people) like Dennis like to spice it up. In the future I would like to consider more sexual focused game where people come in expecting to be taken advantage of my AI Monsters.

Could you please write a part 2, I'd love to see Thomas in Kyle's body explore his new body some more, find a guy, go out on a date, get laid in his new body for the first time as well as deal with the old Kyle's life and friends, having them surprised that Kyle is gay adjusting to knowing this new Kyle. And perhaps if you want write a third chapter where the old Kyle does find a new body, not as good as his old one and tries to track down Thomas in his body wanting to get it back... without actually being able to. Just some thoughts. Excellent otherwise.

Awesome assimilation story...loving the aspect he had to watch others being assimilated and fearing the process and planning how to resist just to fail in the end. Would love finding myself in such a predicament...also the idea with kids being speed matured to be assimilated...awesome

I surprised nobody have mentioned thefat anime fan, that was good too, it's hot to think on a big cop being fucked by the kind of men often seen as 'loser'. I can picture him becoming one of McFaggy's frequent clients, maybe even renting him for a bit of company after sex (like some kind of pathetic 'boyfriend') or to share his mouth with a group of ugly nerds while they play dungeons and dragons or watch an anime marathon.

Hoping to see this continue sooner rather then later.

Is still some chance to read the ending of this masterpiece?

the, man I'm so glad you asked, haha, the explicit game-ness of charm, its such a specific but pretty hot? thing I like your take on it, exempla grati: https://mcstories.com/ClassAct/ClassAct.html

Lovin' it man! Awesome job! I'm trying to work out what will make these studs hotter

I'm finding myself in agreement with a lot of these comments. I've become a big fan of manservant and butler transformations ever since reading Cycle Training by Manservant https://www.gayspiralstories.com/newStory/show/148151. The HP universe took me by surprise but could be fun to explore a darker side of magic. The stately feel almost give this like HP lovecraft meets Harry potter. And I'm totally here for that. I especially liked the suit fitting scene. Made sense why he'd have a closet full of suits later in the story. One thing I think Jon touched on is that this story is not edited. There are grammar and formatting mistakes all over the place. Why is a line of dialogue not a new paragraph? It's such a shame because I feel that if people can't read your work they won't judge it for how good and original a piece of writing it is. I used to struggle with that too but I've found that using a free editing software can help. I use http://hemingwayapp.com/ It's on my bookmark bar. Definitely made more for students handing in papers but It works for fiction too. Axon said they were brought out of the story because of the pun-slightly-intended mechanics of quantum mechanics. And while I didn't catch that I was brought out by the fact that I don't think I know what anyone in this story wants. Charlie seems to vacillate between wanting to study quantum mechanics and wanting to play dress up in a rich guy's house. Why did Charlie drop everything to be fitted for a suit with no pushback? It drains an otherwise really hot scene of its charm and sex appeal. Why did he sign a contract he didn't understand? One would think a student at the forefront of scientific study would have the common sense to think over signing his life away for more than a minute at most. If the answers to these questions are "He was under an imperius curse" I will be very dissapointed because I want to believe he changes, but I need to know what he wants to know why he is straying from his goals. Now with James (and by extension the servants) I have a lot of questions. First off, Why is he so nice? I don't think he should be so nice. On the one hand he is shown as propper and fancy. I think you're trying to show him as elitist and self centered. But that's more of an aesthetic he lives in. It's not characterization it doesn't tell me anything about him as a person. What I do see from him is a relatively nice guy who's very interested in helping this man understand magic and further his studies into the quantum world. The only thing close to evil we see him do is stop that servant who was pretty clearly coming out from his magical spell. And that scene went unquestioned by Charlie as well. He becomes a non-agent in the latter half of the story. The thing that really got me though was how James keeps telling Charlie to not wear the uniform. If he's grooming him to be a servant surely he'd be all for the young man wearing the uniform. In summation, this is a great first venture from you. I'm shocked that a first time author made a story that hit this many buttons for me. Please work on your editing and formatting in future chapters and above all DON'T STOP HERE! There needs to be more magical manservant stories on here! I can't wait to read more.

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