Recent Comments

7/21/20, 4:30 AM
Damn man love hairy gorilla bro and devolving content. It's super manly and hot! Can't wait to see what happens next.
7/21/20, 4:29 AM
What a well-written chapter and amazing twist! So curious to see where it goes from here! But as long as someone, be it Jafar or Jake or some combination of the two, ends up as a god and dominating the world, I'll be very happy.
7/21/20, 2:42 AM
@Mind Labyrinth I'll admit, Majid is not the most intricately created character in the literary world - but then again he's not a particularly deep person: He's a chancer and a liar; hoping to swindle money out of tourists without doing it in a way they'll ever spot. He's a low level crook, who isn't necessarily a bad person - he's just not your friend either. I was concerned that Jake's reaction to Jafar's first appearance would seem unrealistic - at no point did he ask any real questions, or reject what was in front of him - in contrast, Majid's primary feelings of fear and disbelief felt more authentic - but again, he's not a hero and he's not our protagonist. He's at best an annoyance to Jafar and an unwitting cum dump for Jake. Jake's feelings for him were formed when Majid was the more attractive of the two of them - now Jake looks in the mirror and sees the man he always wanted to be, Majid really doesn't mean an awful lot to Jake at all - he views him as a "distraction" and little more.
Anonymous
7/21/20, 2:09 AM
more please !!!
zac
7/21/20, 1:29 AM
Great start! Looking forward to seeing where this goes!
Swizzington
7/21/20, 1:14 AM
I'm a big fan of stories with suits, tuxedos, etc., and this story really pushed my buttons! So thanks for posting. With that being said, I agree with much of what Jon S said. The story is confusing in places, frustratingly lacking important details in others, and has whole segments of seemingly redundant material. Also, some of the paragraphs are unwieldy and could use some breaking up. Still, I enjoyed it and I am very excited for chapter 2! :-) Edit: This was your first story, right? In that case, it's a great first effort, and I'd love to see more from you in future!
Anonymous
7/21/20, 1:10 AM
Oh, wouldnt it just be teeeeerrible if mixing too many oils had the unforseen consequense of making the change permanent. Oh nooo.
DragonKink
7/21/20, 1:06 AM
Many thanks for that reply! I might just borrow some of those ideas. I'll let you know if I do!
7/21/20, 12:26 AM
Oh my!! A five on every rating!! You hit every element perfectly and the story was superb. I am so loving this series.
BostonSatyr
7/21/20, 12:21 AM
SilverStat: are you planning on writing more on this theme. do you have a patreon I can contribute to? would that encourage you? you're a gifted writer and i hope you'll share more chapters.