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Anonymous
7/17/20, 7:49 AM
turning guys into emotionless zombies is always a turn on especially when its world domination
7/17/20, 7:22 AM
I had the suspicion that captain Drew might already be controlled by the cookoos when he and Dr.Stone arrived by the milking scene kinda threw me off that track because he seemed generally surprised. In the end he was in on it the whole time? Maybe he just cant remember participating in the milking? Anyway,great story,strong premise. I liked it although it was a bit short and rushed for my taste
Johnthedoe
7/17/20, 6:57 AM
Yeah it is. The original intro gave more introduction to each of the characters present and made it more obvious the perspective was shifting at each break but it got cut when I was trying (and failing) to condense this monster to fit in under 10k words as per the rules of the challenge. The characters also each had longer sections for each of them and hinted a bit more at who was going next before everything got condensed and confusing. Once I start expanding it back over the multiple chapters it should have had to start with there will be fewer per chapter which should help keep what's happening straight. The idea really couldn't work on such a tight word budget and I wish I caught on soon enough to replace it as my entry with something smaller.
7/17/20, 6:52 AM
This is perhaps late on my part, but I'd like to vote Roger and Phil. It's the one from the start, and it's the one that Roger started out with. It doesn't really make sense to me for this series to have Roger swap love interests when we have so many hits that Phil is coming around to loving Roger. Really like how the story is going overall though, great work dude.
7/17/20, 6:47 AM
basically non-Christian TF stories here, no one complains.. but apparently this one is a problem? there is even a story of "missionaries eies" what get converted to what they are not.
7/17/20, 6:45 AM
I am surprised no one said the same about it being discriminating on Christians ans to non-Christian Transformation kind of Hypocrisy for it only to be said on Mormons, when any other religion there is no complains... just saying
Anonymous
7/17/20, 6:36 AM
I think I saw this image, :) (I think it's merman, but my english is not the best either.) Well, I publish nothing for a few month, and then I tend to write a dump of several chapters I wrote in a few weeks, so I understand the feeling of not publishing often. Ah yes, can understand, I'm trying to think of something to write something for that series since a few month, barely got anything. Right now, I'm just trying to compile every info given trough the chapters, so I have a clear description of the characters, and write them in a coherent way.
7/17/20, 6:29 AM
Is the story switching first-person narrators in each section? I was just so confused trying to keep track of all these characters and the complex mythology and (I think) the shifting perspectives.
7/17/20, 5:56 AM
Ohhh, that sounds like a great idea to me :) A good way to get a different perspective x3 The positive stories are very interesting, especially since they are not the most frequent in this small world of hypno-kink. This fetish certainly favors stories about forced relationships about theft of will, unexpected or clueless hypnotism, or brainwash. I enjoy that I can't complain, hahaha. But precisely because of this when a benevolent, friendly or romantic hypnosis story appears, I really enjoy it. That is why I liked your story so much :) Yes, I know Somnefarious, I really love his art and style :) (In fact a long time ago I commissioned an image from him, about a boy being hypnotized by a merboy (merman? Mermaid? Sorry my english isn't perfect xD) he posted it on his twitter. I've thought about writing a story about it.) Even so I must learn to summarize, it would help me to publish more often xD Oh yeah. That chapter :) It really was a lot of fun to write. Actually I almost managed to complete a continuation of that chapter (I would say it's 85% complete) but I got stuck and didn't continue writing :P I'm waiting for some inspiration to continue that chapter. xD
Anonymous
7/17/20, 5:32 AM
That was pretty hot!