Recent Comments

7/16/20, 9:05 AM
really liked the premise,just a bit short
7/16/20, 8:52 AM
Very hot story! The progression into depravity was fleshed out very well, and I can see Shemrath working his ways in other towns. Is this going to be a series?
Johnthedoe
7/16/20, 7:05 AM
Yeah my first attempt to write (I guess admitting I'm new kinda ruins the suspense) ended up being more of a learning experience than anticipated. I massively underestimated how much world building my brain was doing and by the time I realized the tangled web I'd created wouldn't fit in a space remotely close to 10k the deadline was too close for a complete rewrite. I literally hit publish less than two minutes before the deadline after spending the last four days trying to untangle and extract enough plot threads to make a smaller story. Editing is effectively nonexistent as no part of the story escaped having massive chunks ripped out and hastily stitched back together in my attempt at shrinking it down. I spent the last few hours before the deadline franticly cutting sentences apart and trying to taxidermy them back into something coherent when the sentence structure inevitably broke. I didn't completely succeed and I'm sure half of the tags apply to bits that didn't survive the unwinding. You guys wouldn't believe how much got removed before I even started putting it onto the site. The original beginning got axed completely and the ending doesn't even go in the direction it was originally going to. I told myself I was going to post a story about a swim team getting dicked into werewolves for the challenge, and despite my traitorous brain's valiant efforts to stop me that's what I did. Now I know to limit the amount of world building I allow my brain to do the next time I try to write something with a word count limit. After the challenge is over I'll put this shambling zombie of word vomit down and properly resurrect the story as the multiple chapters it should have been from the start.
7/16/20, 5:19 AM
For a reality changing pen not much reality was altered for interesting stuff, as Ryan just used it to become a dom and have slaves.
Anonymous
7/16/20, 4:17 AM
I can't wait to see what other kinds of transformations the jocks get into. It might be hot if there was some overall shrinking or size play: losing height, but keeping the muscle and cock size, or transferring muscle or size from one jock to the other. I really liked the cock shrinking in the last two chapters. Overall a really fun story so far, so please continue!
7/16/20, 3:31 AM
I LOVE THIS STORY! Keep it up.
Author Of This Story
7/16/20, 2:25 AM
Thanks everyone for the kind and encouraging comments! I'm happy you liked it, and I'm happy to hear from you @nycboot. I must confess that I was hoping you might notice this story and comment. ;) And if you liked it, all the better! As for your guess, I'm afraid time will have to tell!
7/16/20, 1:28 AM
Hey, I trust you man. This is a fun ride, and you're leading us along a steamy path.
Anonymous
7/16/20, 1:27 AM
love a good video game induction story!
7/16/20, 1:25 AM
I cant wait for the next chapter and more changes! Love the cock shrinking aspects! AWESOME!