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7/7/20, 9:57 AM
Very hot story, as usual! I think it works best when you show the interactions between the various slaves. Coach Sampson persuading his son by saying, "Be a good jock and conform" was probably the erotic high-point for me. On the other hand, we probably get a few too many scenes of Master Mike calling out orders and his slaves immediately obeying. A bit of that is fine but, for me, it starts to feel repetitive over the course of a 10000 word chapter.
7/7/20, 9:50 AM
Thank you for the feedback. I did rush a bit through the sex scene, hopefully the next one feels more organic. Yeah, the dialogue is choppy, and it formats a bit different from the writing part to the published part, for the next one I'm going to try a different approach and if it works better I'll update this one. 😊
7/7/20, 9:31 AM
Very cute story! I like the way you gently poke fun at gay porn fiction cliches, while still indulging in them.
7/7/20, 8:26 AM
A nice piece of writing.
7/7/20, 7:05 AM
Wow, I didn't actually expected a response! Its good to know that you still plan to work on this series! I miss your updates in general. I'm a huge fan of your work!
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7/7/20, 6:17 AM
Wow! Great hypnosis story! i don't think i've ever read a story that has detailed the session to this extent, and included so many different steps to further deepen the trance and through each step also deepen their psychological acceptance of male on male sex. i too love the way Max used the actions of the boys with each other and the resulting arousal and sexual pleasure to deepen their trance. Absolutely one of my favorites. Thanks so much!
7/7/20, 5:06 AM
NGiT has a point that's technically valid to me if you wanna be specific for the rules of this period's writing competition. I mean regardless of a mis-tag that hopefully the mods can edit as they see fit appropriately, the story itself is still something that can be judged separately after the tag comments.
7/7/20, 4:39 AM
I like where you're going with this. Very nicely written, and the progression is great.
7/7/20, 4:21 AM
Hey Kyle, thanks for your comment! Happy to hear that someone continues to have interest in this series! Yes, don't worry, I have been working on the next part for quite some time and it's about over halfway through now. I apologize for the massive long delay on it...I got a bit of a writer's block and fatigue with the story after the last few chapters, so decided to take a break from it to refresh my ideas on it. I've slowly started picking up on it again with renewed interest and taking my time to try and write something good rather than just filling up the page. This has been one of my first ventures into fetish story writing, so it's a bit special to me by now and I've committed myself to see through it to its end as I have laid out in mind. So it will come, but I don't want to promise any set timeframe...Hope you can bear with me and stay tuned! ;-)
7/7/20, 3:31 AM
enjoyed this a lot. different, quirky, funny, and endearing. would really like to see more in this story line.