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7/5/20, 11:56 PM
Pretty hot story. It’s very very hot and I love where you took it. Small critique: I would have loved to read more about the men Sid fucks. You describe the sex very well but don’t focus on their bodies at all. But a very very minor critique :) Are you continuing? This felt like it could have been an ending, but Sid’s possible concern, finally, about the loss/death of his friend Reggie, hints at a bit more.
7/5/20, 11:24 PM
> that means he started around 195. Fuck, he thinks that’s skinny. > For me, one of the biggest bodybuilding milestones was breaking 200 pounds. That felt like I was in the big boy club. At my largest, I got up to 239, and I liked it, tho the eating was very hard for me. Right now, at 56, I'm at 190-195 -- so lean (my friends call me "veinous") and I consider that a healthy weight for my age. For Rook, tho....
7/5/20, 11:12 PM
Love it. He better make the people in the class forget what the totem can do. This kind of magic always backfires in the end. I hope Matt has a great time (build him up), but I am eager for the fall. Does that make me a bad person?
Jul 5, 2020
Anonymous
7/5/20, 10:40 PM
Not too bad. I kind of liked it but felt the transformation and the sexual relationship at the end was a bit rushed. It would have been nice to see them get a little more together, or him show signs of being more 'masculine' than simply stating, 'now you are masculine.' But that's just personal taste. For a more 'objective' one, whenever someone new is speaking put their quote on a new line. Something like, "James asked, “Can I help you?” Brick took a huge haul off of his cigar and blew the smoke in James’ face saying, “I doubt it, short stack. But I know I can help you!” Brick was smirking as he placed the cigar back in his jaw." looks like James is saying both the first and second set of quotations. It'd be easier to read if it was: James asked, “Can I help you?” Brick took a huge haul off of his cigar and blew the smoke in James’ face saying, “I doubt it, short stack. But I know I can help you!” Brick was smirking as he placed the cigar back in his jaw. Otherwise not a bad first story.
7/5/20, 10:07 PM
Great storyline and it got me hard immediately! Gotta read more so keep going. You do great work!!!
7/5/20, 9:59 PM
Very hot! I loved it.
Jul 5, 2020
7/5/20, 9:58 PM
Storyline is HOT, descriptions are solid, you got me hard & thick real fast! keep going, I want to read more!
7/5/20, 9:38 PM
Great story looking forward to part 3 next week .
Anonymous
7/5/20, 9:31 PM
LOVED THIS STORY.
7/5/20, 9:11 PM
Rook seems like a cool guy. At 5 or so pounds less than Strong... that means he started around 195. Fuck, he thinks that's skinny.