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7/6/20, 4:28 AM
haha thanks everyone for all the comments.
Jul 5, 2020
7/6/20, 4:20 AM
I encourage you to write more. I liked the story, but like most of the comments above I thought it was a bit rushed. If you'd like to talk about ideas, I'd be happy to discuss. Bears and cigars are a favorite of mine. Papa
7/6/20, 4:01 AM
You are a fantastic writer! I can't thank you enough for all the sweat, hard cock, full balls & multiple orgasms....just from reading your stories. I hope you have more in work in the future. Good Luck!
7/6/20, 3:42 AM
I came multiple times while reading this chapter! You have a HOT way with words that keeps me horned. I don't want the chapters to end and wood enjoy these chapters made into a hot/steamy movie (directors, take note)! I can visualize all of the actions of the coaches and assistant coaches. Even my nipples are hard! Good job!
7/6/20, 3:22 AM
Right from the start you had me hard & leaking. The way you describe the raw sex between the coaches will keep me hard all night. Through your words, I feel like I'm in the shower with the coaches, being art of the action. You are now my favorite author and I want, no need, to read more! Thanks!
7/6/20, 1:42 AM
> I really want to hear all about that. Big stache and shaved head.
7/5/20, 11:56 PM
Pretty hot story. It’s very very hot and I love where you took it. Small critique: I would have loved to read more about the men Sid fucks. You describe the sex very well but don’t focus on their bodies at all. But a very very minor critique :) Are you continuing? This felt like it could have been an ending, but Sid’s possible concern, finally, about the loss/death of his friend Reggie, hints at a bit more.
7/5/20, 11:24 PM
> that means he started around 195. Fuck, he thinks that’s skinny. > For me, one of the biggest bodybuilding milestones was breaking 200 pounds. That felt like I was in the big boy club. At my largest, I got up to 239, and I liked it, tho the eating was very hard for me. Right now, at 56, I'm at 190-195 -- so lean (my friends call me "veinous") and I consider that a healthy weight for my age. For Rook, tho....
7/5/20, 11:12 PM
Love it. He better make the people in the class forget what the totem can do. This kind of magic always backfires in the end. I hope Matt has a great time (build him up), but I am eager for the fall. Does that make me a bad person?
Jul 5, 2020
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7/5/20, 10:40 PM
Not too bad. I kind of liked it but felt the transformation and the sexual relationship at the end was a bit rushed. It would have been nice to see them get a little more together, or him show signs of being more 'masculine' than simply stating, 'now you are masculine.' But that's just personal taste. For a more 'objective' one, whenever someone new is speaking put their quote on a new line. Something like, "James asked, “Can I help you?” Brick took a huge haul off of his cigar and blew the smoke in James’ face saying, “I doubt it, short stack. But I know I can help you!” Brick was smirking as he placed the cigar back in his jaw." looks like James is saying both the first and second set of quotations. It'd be easier to read if it was: James asked, “Can I help you?” Brick took a huge haul off of his cigar and blew the smoke in James’ face saying, “I doubt it, short stack. But I know I can help you!” Brick was smirking as he placed the cigar back in his jaw. Otherwise not a bad first story.