Recent Comments

7/4/20, 6:35 PM
wow man, your writing is getting good. it is really not what i expected. but man, the story is good. nice work. i really feel your passion in this.
7/4/20, 5:33 PM
> I love the build up plus, the mix of muscle and hypno. > I like that it has a unique deconstructionist kind of thing going on. Strong points out the conventions of a mind-control story even as he falls victim to them -- or at least, HOPES he's falling victim to them. He wants it to be true... until he discovers that it is true -- that kind of thing. It's super-long, even for me. I didn't expect to write a novel when I started -- I wanted to write a little 10-part weekly Summer Serial, a little light beach reading. 26 chapters later... it's a complete unto itself. At 92,000 words, twice as long as POLLINATION: The Series, my other "long" work. All of the gym characters were real bodybuilders that I crushed on at the time. Can you name them all?
7/4/20, 5:24 PM
> I wish I had your command of expressive language > Your stories have gotten me off more than once! I'd say that's command of language.
Anonymous
7/4/20, 5:22 PM
More please,great series!!!!!!!!!!
7/4/20, 5:13 PM
Love how this is going. Hope Rook gets his little bro Strong his own singlet to work out in at the gym, make him obey the the bigger man if he doesn't want to. Can't wait for the next part!
Jun 28, 2020
7/4/20, 5:05 PM
Great story. More please. this is the mind fuck that gets me, to submit totally. Yes "do every thing" , Yes Master. This way Off we go.
7/4/20, 4:50 PM
I know a LOT of morons that speak well, but don't know what a thesaurus is *eye roll* nor can they do simple math... This is the kind 'dumb' I was going for with this story. Where Drake isn't school smart but he is football and sports smart. Hope this clears things up :) Keep the comments coming guys!
7/4/20, 4:44 PM
lol Sorry, I don't know why but every time I personally think of chaps I think of crotchless leather pants. I shall keep that in mind for future stories though so thank you for the feedback! Criticism is always appreciated! Without it we wouldn't be able to improve as writers :)
M
7/4/20, 4:40 PM
I think I did read this story six or seven times before. It is mine Absman favorite story. I love the build up plus, the mix of muscle and hypno. So good! ❤
7/4/20, 4:38 PM
That was fun! Goblet of Fire is where I noticed him also. Your description of was right on! Can hardly wait to see more celebs.