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Martin
7/3/20, 12:25 PM
Warum les ich diese Geschichte erst jetzt? So süß und erregend! Danke Dir, Michael! (Du könntest gern mehr schreiben und auch mal auf unserem Discord Server vorbei schauen!)
LongtimeFan
7/3/20, 12:12 PM
WOW! This was incredibly hot--love the hypnosis scene, and the description of both men slowly plumping up. But I also like that you explored internalized fatphobia. Great stuff!
7/3/20, 11:52 AM
Fascinating writing style and very inventive! i enjoyed this a lot!
7/3/20, 11:34 AM
This is good mix of strange, hot and funny. Its got a bonus of also being well written too
7/3/20, 11:17 AM
will we see more?
lakritz24
7/3/20, 10:47 AM
Sorry, i am not convinced. It thems erotical very interesting, but i think ( dachte/denke/werde denken): "deus ex or in Ma-China" is not the Truth. Or : "...der Bildschirm leuchtet-Jesus ist anwesend..."? Dieser machte einem "Doktor-Master" ein Angebot, dieses zu be/ge-Denken, mit und für etwas/alle. Doch der Doktor verstand es wohl nicht. Dann dichtete dieser seelige Worte, gerichtet an den "Dr. Master" but the Master does not answer. He was/is seeking of his "Master", but the "Master" wollte nicht mehr kommunizieren. Traurigkeit -endless...
7/3/20, 10:39 AM
Loved you story! Keep it coming!
Martin
7/3/20, 10:09 AM
I've approved your story, but I really recommend working on the formatting. Usually, in fictional stories, you start a new paragraph each time a persons starts to say something or you switch to another person. That's a pretty common standard. Your paragraphs are really long and it makes your story, which is really fascinating as far as I could read it, really hard to read.
Jul 2, 2020
Anonymous
7/3/20, 8:14 AM
while i agree it is bizarre and dark. it is strangely sexy and i love the role reversal. a well written story.
7/3/20, 7:15 AM
It's a really interesting idea, I'm looking forward to part 3!