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lakritz24
7/3/20, 10:47 AM
Sorry, i am not convinced. It thems erotical very interesting, but i think ( dachte/denke/werde denken): "deus ex or in Ma-China" is not the Truth. Or : "...der Bildschirm leuchtet-Jesus ist anwesend..."? Dieser machte einem "Doktor-Master" ein Angebot, dieses zu be/ge-Denken, mit und fΓΌr etwas/alle. Doch der Doktor verstand es wohl nicht. Dann dichtete dieser seelige Worte, gerichtet an den "Dr. Master" but the Master does not answer. He was/is seeking of his "Master", but the "Master" wollte nicht mehr kommunizieren. Traurigkeit -endless...
7/3/20, 10:39 AM
Loved you story! Keep it coming!
Martin
7/3/20, 10:09 AM
I've approved your story, but I really recommend working on the formatting. Usually, in fictional stories, you start a new paragraph each time a persons starts to say something or you switch to another person. That's a pretty common standard. Your paragraphs are really long and it makes your story, which is really fascinating as far as I could read it, really hard to read.
Jul 2, 2020
Anonymous
7/3/20, 8:14 AM
while i agree it is bizarre and dark. it is strangely sexy and i love the role reversal. a well written story.
7/3/20, 7:15 AM
It's a really interesting idea, I'm looking forward to part 3!
Ozark
7/3/20, 6:56 AM
Thanks for everyone's feedback! Pacing is something i definitely have to work on, but now that i have more time on my hands I'll definitely be able to do just that. ;)
7/3/20, 4:43 AM
πŸ’™πŸ’™πŸ’™πŸ’™πŸ’™ I love it... it have the kind of mc I like :3 I'm really happy that you're back with this story ^ ^
Anonymous
7/3/20, 3:30 AM
I loved this series. I hope we can see how Randy becomes a master.
Yup
7/3/20, 3:01 AM
jesus this feels exaxtly like something i would write and its amazing. THANK YOU